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Post #1215232

Author
IlFanEditore
Parent topic
THE CHOSEN ONE: A STAR WARS STORY (V2 in development) (Released)
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Date created
7-Jun-2018, 10:23 AM

Vladius said:

IlFanEditore said:

I would like to get some suggestions about the opening text.

Right now there is written:

"The GALACTIC REPUBLIC has guaranteed peace
in the galaxy for thousands of years.

The Jedi Order serves the Galactic Senate,
led by the Supreme Chancellor.

While a group of systems fights for independence in the CLONE WARS,
the Sith, ancient enemies of the Jedi, return.

The Sith Lord Darth Sidious secretly takes control of
the Separatist Alliance to weaken the Jedi".

Is it good?
Or… how would you change it?

I like it. Maybe add something like,
the Sith, ancient enemies of the Jedi, return from the shadows.

Yes, perfect 😉 Thank you.