I’ve been out of the loop for a few months, but I just have to say this is probably going to be my preferred version.
I do have a suggestion for you: Is it possible to re-edit the fight to sync the quiet part of the score around 1:40ish, to 1:50ish, where Rey and Ren are both struggling? I feel if it can be synced where the score picks up again when Rey drops her lightsaber, it could feel seamless. Maybe. I am a fan of the idea, but I’m not sure it can feel completely seamless.