The opening sequence :

The Poe & Hux “prank call” : ok, slightly better than the theatrical, but I would suggest to remove more, the entire second part of the holding joke which retains too much fof the theatrical prank joke (“I’m holding for Hux” “This is Hux, you and your friends are doom”. It’s repetitive to keep that).

Other suggestion for the opening scene :

remove the entire Hux/Snoke scene which serves no purpose at all. It’s more effective to see Snoke in his throne room for his introduction into the story than seeing this ugly big cgi holo-head. The fact he’s a strong force user won’t be witnessed until it’s relevant, not as a joke to humiliate Hux. And since Hux is in the throne when Ren arrives later, what was the point of the holo-head scene anyway ? It’s fat material that can be remmoved.

From Finn’s awakening to his meeting with Rose, suggestions :

Finn falling from his bed is ridiculous, would be great to remove it if possible.
Remove the meeting with Poe which also has no purpose (“where is Rey ?” as an introduction to Rey being quite a lazy montage trick). Next scene we see Finn, he’s talking on the bridge in full rebel uniform, so the “funny” scene has no point and no use for continuity reasons.
Luke throwing away the saber is still very painful to see.
as well as the blue milk scene…
Rose “ouah !” to Finn’s “May the force be with you” is so ridiculous, hope it could be removed ! (her extatic “You’re Finn!” is also problematic but I sadly don’t think anything could be done about that)

From Maz to light speed suicide :

I sure hope something could be done to trim the Maz scene. There is no soundtrack for this scene, so I guess it could be possible to adjust the dialogues and then to play with pure video editing to make Maz speak as a voice-over most of the scene.
the caretakers removal : oh ! Good job on that guys 😉
Canto arrival/leaving the jail: seamless job. I’ll rewatch the theatrical cut of the scene to see what has been removed, but just watching your take on it I don’t think more is needed (well, maybe Canto being a war profiters planet speech by Rose could be reinstalled, but with the later DJ speech it might not be that useful).
“Removed the detail from Kylo Ren that Rey’s parents are buried in the Jakku desert, as this seems at odds with the vision we saw in The Force Awakens.” well, I am in favor to keep that line.

Until the end of the movie :

I’m OK with all the changes made.
Good call to keep the remaining porg humor, but I believe that every Hux repeating orders moments should been removed.
The removal of Rose’s line (“saving the ones we love”) is noticeable. I think the line should be put back.
Hux being force pushed is quite ridiculous.