Watched your edits:
Poe’s Intro - The idea of having NO conversation between Poe and Hux, this can work, with Hux being puzzled by a lone light fighter and NOT firing on it right away since the X-wing boost happens right away. I would also like to see an edit that trims the conversation as opposed to eliminating it all the way. However, this does stand on itself very well.
Maz Convo - Any reduction to this scene is a plus. Nicely done!
Fathier Escape - Same view with the Maz Convo. I would have to watch it again, but man, if there was a quick scene of the kid looking up to the Fathier and smirk … then it cuts to the tea cup rattling … that would be great.
Ending with Post-Credit scene - I REALLY like the idea of a post credit scene with the kid. I am not sure if the actually ending works right … it doesn’t seem right to me since it seems rushed.