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A script for a new scene in ANH

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DARTHFINGERZ at the force.net wrote a script for a new scene in ANH, at first you'll say to your selves you guys are dicks and a new scene in ANH would suck but hear me out for a sec....

I managed to tweak the script a bit and hope that will tie in with Empire's 2004 DVD holo.....



Note...that DARTHFINGERZ's is the guy you want to shake his hand. 90% of the script is his and 10% I've tweaked




NEW SCENE: "Vader's Return to Coruscant"

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EXT. CORUSCANT - RAINY NIGHT SKY

In the distance we see Vader’s shuttle
flying downward through vast clouds formations.

EXT. IMPERIAL BASE

Thunder and lightning strikes as it
pours down heavily onto the Capital
planet. Vader's damaged shuttle docks
upon a watery landing platform.

INT. IMPERIAL BASE - MOMENTS LATER

The sound of the rain is prevalent
as it is heard through open areas along
the perimeter of the base. Droids,
stormtroopers and personnel are
visible as they scatter about.

Hovering beside Vader as he walks is a
holographic transmitter displaying the
ominous form of Palpatine.

(Palpatine)
Lord Vader, the destruction of our battle station,
and defeat at the hands of a
pitiful band of rebels. It would
seem...this so called alliance
has shown greater resolve then
I had foreseen.

(DarthVader)
Yes, master.

Vader continues walking slowly as the
holographic transmitter follows beside
him flickering out slightly.

(Palpatine)
We have lost a great deal.
(a beat)
Governor Tarkin is not as easily
replaceable as others may be...Lord Vader.

Vader recognizes what Palpatine has implied.

(DarthVader)
Master, I have destroyed Obi-Wan Kenobi.

(Palpatine)
Is that so? This may explain
the tremor I have sensed in the
force. If your former master
survived though, I wonder then -
if other Jedi may have survived
too?

(DarthVader)
No, that is not possible. The Jedi purge is now complete.

(Darth Vader)
Master what about the destruction of the Death Star?, we could be vunerable to Rebel Attacks.

(Palpatine)
I have already contacted my men, a new Grand Moff, Jerjerrod from Endor and his men are already planning a more powerful weapon that will keep the galaxy under my control. The Alliance and the Galaxy must not know about this.

(Darth Vader)
Yes, my master.

(Palpatine)
Lord Vader, I am putting you in charge of the Empire. Your first main priority is to locate any Rebel base you encounter and take the troops and cease control of it. Do what must be done and see that the Rebellion will suffer for this outburst.

A commander is seen approaching.
Vader senses that the commander
needs to speak urgently.

(DarthVader)
Yes my master, the Rebellion will be crushed soon enough.

(Palpatine)
Yes...see to it my able apprentice.

The Emperor's holo image disappears.
Thunder cracks again.

(DarthVader)
What is it Commander?

(Commander)
I apologize for the intrusion my Lord.
However, we have attained the identity
of the lead fighter Pilot instrumental
in the attack on our battle station.

(DarthVader)
Yes?

(Commander)
Skywalker sir...Luke Skywalker.

Vader is taken back by this news.

(Commander)
M'Lord...

The Commander takes leave of Vader.

Vader looks out onto the rainy Coruscant
night. He drifts into heavy thought.

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5 things that you will notice about it.....

1. The Emperor is contacting Vader via Holo. This means that after ROTS you are wondering what happened to the Emperor's look and in this scene and ESB's you only see Palps in a holo..and you are not too sure what his clearly looks like..but then in Jedi you see what has become of him in the last 20 years. Which is clearly more artistic.

2. Palps is unaware about Luke Skywalker.

3. You don't know that his men are building another Death Star. You think is something more scairer..but then your completely shocked to find in ROTJ's crawl that is indeed another Death Star!!

4. If you are a newbie and watching the saga in order for the first time..you are clearly pissing yourself to find out that Vader's son is alive and at the end your saying to yourself..
"Luke..he knows your alive"!!!!

5. Vader is in a drift thought when he finds that Luke is his son..and by the time Empire comes he's plotting against the Emperor for definate.
"A Jedi can feel the force flow through him".
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You're a dick for even suggesting adding a scene to ANH!


hehe, just kidding.
That's not a bad peice of fan fiction, but I agree that I don't want any more alterations to the original films.
It does sound like an idea for a peice of EU maybe.

My stance on revising fan edits.

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Not too bad, but 2 things:

1- Star Wars rarely has scenes of that length, especially with dialogue. Lucas likes quick, fast pacing for the Empire.
2- Where would you insert it at? I mean, in the current film, where would it go?
The Jedi are all but extinct.......
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Oh by the way there is to be no absolute CG added in the scene..just in case you didn't know.
"A Jedi can feel the force flow through him".
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Interesting read I guess, but it just proves that in TF.n land people think like Lucas- let's take out all mystery and all thought that our audience can actually figure something out on their own. Typical I suppose.
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Yeah, it's nice, but there's really absolutely no need for it. It's all information that we find out eventually anyway.

There is no lingerie in space…

C3PX said: Gaffer is like that hot girl in high school that you think you have a chance with even though she is way out of your league because she is sweet and not a stuck up bitch who pretends you don’t exist… then one day you spot her making out with some skinny twerp, only on second glance you realize it is the goth girl who always sits in the back of class; at that moment it dawns on you why she is never seen hanging off the arm of any of the jocks… and you realize, damn, she really is unobtainable after all. Not that that is going to stop you from dreaming… Only in this case, Gaffer is actually a guy.

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That's the only change than can be added. That and Han shoots first and the lightsabers.
"A Jedi can feel the force flow through him".
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It's redundent, messes up the pacing of the film and is altogether unnecessary.

Does anyone care anymore about pacing? Exposition? Character development? Do we REALLY need everything spelled out for us?

Expand those craniums!

What’s the internal temperature of a TaunTaun? Luke warm.

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I think it would look OK if placed before the throne room meddals scene. I would only remove the "Order 66" reference, as it would make no sense in mentioning it 19 years later.

Of course, if one was to do such a scene, it would be for fans only, and for fan edit versions, and NOT for commercial releases. Don't give GL ideas. Please.
“Voice or no voice, the people can always be brought to the bidding of the leaders. That is easy. All you have to do is tell them they are being attacked and denounce the pacifists for lack of patriotism and exposing the country to danger. It works the same in any country.” — Nazi Reich Marshal Hermann Goering
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Actually, now that I think about it, it would fit nicely following the 'return. When they walk off down that hallway together arm in arm, cut to this scene.
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I've further tweaked the script, translating it into English (a little may have been lost) and making it a little easier for audiences to understand.


NEW SCENE: "Vader's Return to Coruscant"

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EXT. CORUSCANT - RAINY NIGHT SKY

In the distance we see Vader’s shuttle
flying downward through vast clouds formations.

EXT. IMPERIAL BASE

Thunder and lightning strikes as it
pours down heavily onto the Capital
planet.

INT. SHUTTLE COCKPIT

(Captain Nic Olie)
It's raining! On a city-covered planet!
How is that possible?!

Darth Vader slaps Nic Olie across the
back of the head.

EXT. IMPERIAL BASE

Vader's damaged shuttle docks
upon a watery landing platform.

INT. IMPERIAL BASE - MOMENTS LATER

The sound of the rain is prevalent
as it is heard through open areas along
the perimeter of the base. Droids,
stormtroopers and gungans are
visible as they scatter about.

Hovering beside Vader as he walks is a
holographic transmitter displaying the
ominous form of Palpatine.

(Palpatine)
Lord Vader, the topic of tonight's
discussion will be: 'The destruction of
our battle station and defeat at the
hands of a pitiful band of rebels'. It
would seem...this so called alliance
has shown greater resolve then
I had foreseen.

(DarthVader)
Yes, master.

Vader continues walking slowly as the
holographic transmitter follows beside
him flickering out slightly.

(Palpatine)
We have lost a great deal.
(a beat)
Governor Tarkin is not as easily
replaceable as others may be...Lord Vader.

Vader recognizes what Palpatine has implied,
but believes some of the audience may not have.

(DarthVader)
Master, I have destroyed Obi-Wan Kenobi, my
old Master who was present when you
commanded me to kill your last apprentice,
Count Dooku.

(Palpatine)
Is that so? This may explain
the tremor I have sensed in the
force. If your former master
survived though, I wonder then -
if other Jedi may have survived
too?

(DarthVader)
No, that is not possible. Order 66 has now been fulfilled.

Darth Vader removes his mask revealing
the eyebrowless face of Hayden
Christensen, winks at the camera,
then replaces his helmet.

(Darth Vader)
Master what about the destruction of the Death Star?
We could be vunerable to Rebel Attacks.

(Palpatine)
I have already contacted my men, a new Grand Moff,
Jerjerrod from Endor and his men are already planning
a more powerful weapon that will keep the galaxy
under my control. The Alliance and the Galaxy must not
know about this, but make sure everyone in the Milky
Way galaxy do find out.

(Darth Vader)
Yes, my master.

(Palpatine)
Lord Vader, I am putting you in charge of the Empire,
ignore what I implied earlier about possibly killing you.
Your failure to protect the Death Star has given me the
confidence to finally take a special holiday on Kashyyyk.
Your first main priority is to locate All Your Rebel Base you
encounter and take the troops and cease control of it.
Once the control has been stopped, you may seize it.
Your second main priority is to combat redundancy.
Do what must be done and see that the Rebellion will
suffer for this poor grammatical outburst.

A commander is seen approaching.
Vader senses that the commander
needs to speak urgently.

(DarthVader)
Yes my master, the Rebellion will be crushed soon enough.

(Palpatine)
Yes...see to it my 'more able than Darth
Maul' apprentice.

The Emperor's holo image disappears.
Thunder cracks again.

(DarthVader)
What is it Commander?

(Commander)
I apologize for the intrusion my Lord.
However, we have attained the identity
of the lead fighter Pilot instrumental
in the attack on our battle station.

(DarthVader)
Yes?

(Commander)
Dreis sir...Garven Dreis. You managed to
kill him though so you may be more
interested in the pilot that actually
destroyed the Death Star, Luke Skywalker.

Vader is taken back by this news.

(Commander)
M'Lord...

The Commander takes leave of Vader.

Vader looks out onto the rainy Coruscant
night. He drifts into heavy thought.

(Darth Vader)
Yes... how the hell does it rain here?!

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It never rains on Coruscant until after Galactic City is destroyed and the planetary orbit shifted.

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Now that is a scene. A scene I would be proud to have in my world of Star Wars! ^_^

There is no lingerie in space…

C3PX said: Gaffer is like that hot girl in high school that you think you have a chance with even though she is way out of your league because she is sweet and not a stuck up bitch who pretends you don’t exist… then one day you spot her making out with some skinny twerp, only on second glance you realize it is the goth girl who always sits in the back of class; at that moment it dawns on you why she is never seen hanging off the arm of any of the jocks… and you realize, damn, she really is unobtainable after all. Not that that is going to stop you from dreaming… Only in this case, Gaffer is actually a guy.

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Originally posted by: Darth Chaltab
It never rains on Coruscant until after Galactic City is destroyed and the planetary orbit shifted.


THIS IS CETI ALPHA FIVE!

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Originally posted by: Darth Chaltab
It never rains on Coruscant until after Galactic City is destroyed and the planetary orbit shifted.


LOL i was thinking that. but isnt there a scene in the PT somewhere that shows rain on curocant like when mace gets thrown out the window.


i think the scene would be a great idea, it would be a good way to replace the cliffhanger at the end of empire as that is no good any more. i dont think it would ruin the paseing either, a scene like that only takes about a min or a min and a half of scene time, and for the amount it adds its good.
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Yeah, but there's really no need to do it. We know that Obi-Wan is killed. We know the Death Star has been destroyed. And, you know, it just might be possible that Luke was the one who did it, too. We know Tarkin is dead. We know Vader escaped. All it does is repeat information that's been shown elsewhere. It's worse than exposition because, rather than just explaining something through dialogue instead of showing it, it would show the events and then explain it again. I'm fairly certain that in practically every movie, if a scene like that existed, it would have been the first thing to end up on the cutting room floor.

There is no lingerie in space…

C3PX said: Gaffer is like that hot girl in high school that you think you have a chance with even though she is way out of your league because she is sweet and not a stuck up bitch who pretends you don’t exist… then one day you spot her making out with some skinny twerp, only on second glance you realize it is the goth girl who always sits in the back of class; at that moment it dawns on you why she is never seen hanging off the arm of any of the jocks… and you realize, damn, she really is unobtainable after all. Not that that is going to stop you from dreaming… Only in this case, Gaffer is actually a guy.

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i c your point the majour thing is relaying the info that luke blew it up to vader. and that could be done very quickly. and for those that are watching it in order it would increase the drama and give purpose to some of the things that became redundant after the PT, just cause the audence knows something it doesnt mean that the characters, magically find out. its part of drama, seeing the reaction when you know something is the case when they dont, then seeing them find out.
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Correct me if I'm wrong, but isn't the main purpose of this proposed scene to work the Emperor into A New Hope? And I've heard similar ideas about trying to work Yoda in the movie as well. Okay, so, with all six of these films (and I don't really think about them as six films I-VI, but in this particular case I'll go with it) together, I admit that A New Hope does stand out as being the only movie that doesn't showcase these two characters. I won't even make my standard defense about ruining the reveal for these characters later on since we're accepting them as I-VI at the moment. But the point remains that they're not there simply because there's no reason for them to be there. They have nothing to do, and any attempt to incorporate them in would seem, in my opinion, forced. It would be the equivalent of trying to work Lando into A New Hope because it's the only movie of the original trilogy not the feature him. There would be a scene during the Death Star battle where it has Han flying away from Yavin when he suddenly gets a call from his old buddy Lando who, as it turns out, convinces Han to go back and help the Rebels. Yeah, okay, that scene sucks, but I hope my point remains the same. Forcing characters in for the sake of them being there isn't a good enough reason for them to be there. I must admit that Revenge of the Sith did a good job with that by having Jar-Jar and the other Naboo peoples stand in the background as extras during Padme's funeral. They didn't say anything and, besides Jar-Jar, were barely noticeable, and they belonged there. But there was no attempt, except with Jar-Jar, that really pointed out, "Hey, we're here! Look at us! We were in the other movies!"

So I agree with whoever said that it's a good scene from a fanfiction perspective and is cool to think about the events that transpired after Vader escaped, but they really don't belong in the actual movie.

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C3PX said: Gaffer is like that hot girl in high school that you think you have a chance with even though she is way out of your league because she is sweet and not a stuck up bitch who pretends you don’t exist… then one day you spot her making out with some skinny twerp, only on second glance you realize it is the goth girl who always sits in the back of class; at that moment it dawns on you why she is never seen hanging off the arm of any of the jocks… and you realize, damn, she really is unobtainable after all. Not that that is going to stop you from dreaming… Only in this case, Gaffer is actually a guy.

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Originally posted by: Shimraa
its part of drama, seeing the reaction when you know something is the case when they dont, then seeing them find out.


But unless Hayden does take off the helmet and reveal his lack of eyebrows then he can't effectively react anyway, so that scene is still redundant.

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LMAO

but..seriously though could you tweak and make it a bit better, anyone, please.
"A Jedi can feel the force flow through him".
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Originally posted by: ricarleite
I think it would look OK if placed before the throne room meddals scene. I would only remove the "Order 66" reference, as it would make no sense in mentioning it 19 years later.

Of course, if one was to do such a scene, it would be for fans only, and for fan edit versions, and NOT for commercial releases. Don't give GL ideas. Please.



Yes the scene must be placed before the medal throne room..definatly. I did feel the Order 66 reference did feel stupid..so I went back and renamed it to "The Jedi purge is now complete".

Just in case you guys don't know...DON'T ADD YODA TO ANH!!!!!!


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That scene would also help the audience keep in mind that ANAKIN is the main character of Star Wars, not Luke/Han/Leia. Granted, he's obviously the main character in the PT, but in the OT, he gets put in the background of the story, almost as an afterthough. A scene like that would go alongway to making DARTH VADER a character, instead of a villian who happens to be Luke's father.
Which is the more foolish, the fool (the OT) or the fool who follows (the PT)?

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I don't care how many new movies George Lucas makes, or how many visions he claims to have, but Luke Skywalker will ALWAYS be the main character of Star Wars. Period.

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C3PX said: Gaffer is like that hot girl in high school that you think you have a chance with even though she is way out of your league because she is sweet and not a stuck up bitch who pretends you don’t exist… then one day you spot her making out with some skinny twerp, only on second glance you realize it is the goth girl who always sits in the back of class; at that moment it dawns on you why she is never seen hanging off the arm of any of the jocks… and you realize, damn, she really is unobtainable after all. Not that that is going to stop you from dreaming… Only in this case, Gaffer is actually a guy.

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Originally posted by: Shimraa
its part of drama, seeing the reaction when you know something is the case when they dont, then seeing them find out.


But unless Hayden does take off the helmet and reveal his lack of eyebrows then he can't effectively react anyway, so that scene is still redundant.


that can be argued. but it opens up a whole can of worms cause its all aobut interpretation.

and its not redundant cause Vader doesnt know that it was Luke who blew up the DS in fact he doesnt even know that luke is alive, remember the story its not being told in movies its been shown. you cant always make assumptions.