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Post #1184192

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nhoj3
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Star Wars: The Last Jedi - The Dark Cut (* unfinished project *)
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Date created
17-Mar-2018, 8:10 PM

darthrush said:

nhoj3 said:

darthrush said:

Took some advice from various feedback I got and tried to improve the first Canto Bight scene.

https://vimeo.com/260569565

-Full Casino establishing shot restored after they are reported for parking on beach.
-Tracking shot of Canto Bight is cut short before we see Finn and then a shot of someone popping open some champagne is clipped to the end instead.

I like this version since it gives breathing room to feel the Casino before we see Finn and Rose. I like being able to absorb the culture and feel of the visuals and then getting out of there quick enough so we don’t get bogged down in other material.

Please tell me if there is anything else that can be improved.

Just a thought, but would it work with the tracking shot first? So: “from stories”, tracking shot, clinking glasses, balcony, waterfall, reported on beach, wide angle of casino, champagne popping, Finn?

I’m not sure this would work all that well. The idea with the current order of scenes is that she says she has only heard of Canto Bight, the planet itself, in stories. Then you see the planet shots before anything in the casino. Then after the man says “they headed off towards the casino”, you get a wide shot of the casino, then you see inside, and then we see Finn.

Sorry, I’m writing on my iPhone and probably cutting too many corners in my suggestion. I think that what I’m suggesting works within those bookends. I was just suggesting changing the order of how the casino is seen so that the first shot after the establishing shot of the planet is the casino tracking shot. That leads to the outside scenes and the “reporting” scene. Then the wide shot of the casino, then inside, but since the tracking scene was moved up you get to Finn and Rose right away.

Hope that makes sense… it does in my head at least… lol

Man, I really want to get into fan editing myself.

Love your work by the way.