Originally posted by: Gillean
Papa Vader, looking good, just a few spelling errors in the Vader monologue- disturbing, Emperor's, I (looks like it was lower-case), finally, foreseen and whispering.
The grammar is a little awkward in a few spots too, maybe a slight rewrite would help, other than that, good work!
Papa Vader, looking good, just a few spelling errors in the Vader monologue- disturbing, Emperor's, I (looks like it was lower-case), finally, foreseen and whispering.
The grammar is a little awkward in a few spots too, maybe a slight rewrite would help, other than that, good work!
@Gillean: English being only my second language (I am French speaking), that kind of things creeps up more than I would like... A few pointer on how to correct the awkwardness you mentioned is welcomed and needed!
@SquashMaster: I am trying to do something different (the art, the kind of text...), so using the title scroll is not a thing I would consider for this set...(yes there are more to come!) Anyhow, tell me what you find is cheesy and i'll work on it!
Thanks to Coov's suggestion and Gillean's proof reading, here is V2
