I would delete the scene of Hux informing Snoke he found the location of the rebel base because it never affects the plot in this edit.
That’s in so we know the base is the weapon’s next target, which gives the Resistance a little more reason to keep fighting rather than just retreat and lick their wounds. In V1 it was mostly an unspoken sense of revenge for the destruction of Hosnian Prime, which didn’t work quite so well.
I think continuing out of the unspoken sense Starkiller Base will continue to be a threat to the galaxy works better.
In the end, Starkiller Base is still destroyed right when it is about to fire on the Resistance Base. This fact draws attention away from the failed attempt to save the Republic from destruction.
Also, in this version, Starkiller Base requires much more time to charge before it fires on the Republic than before it is about to fire on the Resistance Base.
I love this edit much more than the official version, but I would still cut Hux informing Snoke he found the location of the rebel base as well as the “prepare to refire” scene.