I think that the way you’re talking about the Jedi not being good is exactly what Lucas had in mind with the prequels, and that’s how I view them. The execution wasn’t really convincing though.

Loved the Skywalker nickname idea, and the Padme noblewoman idea, and the several Clone Wars idea too. It always bothered me how the clone warS was only one War.

The only one I’m not sure is the Obi-Wan exiling himself for guild. I think it’s pretty badass when both he and Yoda do whatever they can to take down an entire empire.

And by the way, I had read the first quarter of your chapter one and just finished it, and I really loved it. Keep it up!