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Post #1155194

Author
Grand Admiral Thrawn
Parent topic
Star Wars Episode III: Labyrinth Of Evil (Released)
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Date created
6-Jan-2018, 11:39 PM

Awesome news Hal. I am very excited for Version 4.3.

Just a small suggestion, but in the crawl for Episode III, the first sentence reads a little weird to me with where the “nearly” is placed in there.

Original:
After years of civil war, the Separatists have battered the faltering Republic nearly to the point of collapse. The fragile government is crumbling under attacks from the ruthless Count Dooku.

Suggested:
After years of civil war, the Separatists have battered the faltering Republic to the point of near collapse. The fragile government is crumbling under attacks from the ruthless Count Dooku.

Also, will the weird-looking “G” in APPROACHING be fixed with SirRidley’s crawls? Haha