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Post #1147993

Author
snooker
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STAR WARS EPISODE I: Dawn of War (Old Version) (* unfinished project *)
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Date created
24-Dec-2017, 12:24 AM

Anakin Starkiller said:

I like it. I don’t know if you’re aware already, but you can still see the edge of the wall above Obi-Wan’s head when he’s talking to Anakin.

It will be fixed, thank you!

Anyways, does anybody have any “non-image” issues with the clip? Like is the music too loud when Obi-Wan is talking etc.

Anywho, I need some help developing the crawl. Here’s my current prototype:

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It is a period of unrest. Several thousand solar systems have left the Republic, leaving the galaxy in turmoil.

This SEPARATIST ALLIANCE in its hunger for more members has invaded the small planet of Naboo, hoping to secure its alliance by force.

The Supreme Chancellor of the Republic has secretly dispatched two Jedi Knights, the guardians of peace and justice in the galaxy, to settle the conflict…

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I really don’t like how it feels to read it. It has all of the needed details, but it doesn’t really flow. If anybody has any suggestions, I’m open.