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Post #1141998

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darthrush
Parent topic
TFA: A Gentle Restructure (Released)
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Date created
14-Dec-2017, 1:55 AM

NeverarGreat said:

There are the slight problems which would remain, namely the interpretation that the Resistance is blowing up the planet out of revenge, and that Chewie was responsible for the destruction of the Republic by not immediately blowing the charges before the weapon fired. So we would ideally include the Ackbar scene or some version of the weapon preparing to fire again. We would also need to split the aerial battle again to smooth over the scene transition.

Would the following work?

  • Detonate the charges
  • “The oscillator has been damaged but is still functional” - just like in the original, except the last words are heard over Poe’s radio.
  • “looks like our friends got in”
  • Forest battle part 1
  • Attack run (sans “prepare to fire”)
  • Forest battle part 2

And Hal’s gone to so much trouble to get that line replacement 😛

This sounds pretty great if the Ackbar line could be made to sound a little smoother. I think if Hal finds a good line replacement that says something like “weapon recharged in 30 seconds” or “reprimed” then that line would be a must. The more to help lessen any confusion.