It took me quite a while to figure out the red coloration was from an alarm flashing on and off. At first, I thought it was some failed attempt at recoloring the ship. It’s confusing, and I’d just remove it, given that it doesn’t really serve a purpose. Also, Dooku’s message is too short.
I agree with the alarm flashing, it distracted me for a moment before understanding what was going on.
About dooku’s messege, i dont think its short, but miss placed. We see a stablishing shot of the federation ship, then dooku speak, another quiky stablishing shot of the ship and finaly the bad guys speak. What if dooku’s messege was before meeting palpatine? I dont know.
And great job with the scene! I am very corious to see all of it, very bold edit 😃