The Nemoidian dialogue sounds a little weird, but that might just be something I need to get used to. Would you be willing to consider matching your subtitles to the OT theatrical style as seen in Harmy’s Despecialized rather than the thinner yellow font you’re using?
Also, there’s some glowyness/haloing around the Federation ship above Geonosis that could probably be smoothed out/blended a bit better.
Other than that, looks pretty good!