Personally, I’d cut all of Saw and Bodhi’s scenes before Jyn and Cassian get to Saw’s group. This way you’d meet Saw with Jyn (you can take the shot of Saw’s legs walking from the scene where he meets Bodhi in the original version to give his meeting with Jyn a more “character introduction” feel) and Bodhi with Cassian. You can tone Bodhi’s post-Bor Gullet confusion down too.
(I would definitely cut Artoo and Threepio and Ponda Baba and Evazan’s cameos, though.)
That is a good idea as well. I think the scene is meant to show how Saw has sort of gone off the deep end, but I guess we still see that briefly when he speaks to Jyn. Even though I would hate to lose more screen time for Riz Ahmed and Forest Whittaker, it wouldn’t hurt to at least try it out and see how it feels without it.
And if enough people think I should remove the cameos I might. They’re easy enough to get rid of!
Two things I would add to this take out the weird squid scene and the first clip cuts way to quickly it needs to have an audio fade or a wipe transition
Thanks for the input! I might take out the squid scene. I wonder if it would help if I made a before and after to help show how it differs from the original version at least. Also, I didn’t change how the first clip cuts away, that is how it is in the original, if you are referring to the briefing room scene.
Clips look pretty damn good! There’s some dead air in the “doesn’t sound so bad” line removal that should be filled with ambient environmental audio, though, and there’s some more blending needed to smooth out the audio on some of the lines in the briefing scene. Other than that, it all looks and sounds great!
I listened to that part again and I didn’t hear any dead air, I have ambience running throughout. You may have misheard it or maybe I’m missing it! If you wouldn’t care to double check I would appreciate it. You should hear that locust-like sound all the way through.
Yeah I agree. I think I have smoothed out Mon Mothma’s “and return him to the Senate” a bit more than it is in the clip now. It is definitely a challenge because of how quickly they talk. Thanks for the input!
I think in this edit they know Galen is building the weapon, but they don’t know that Galen sent Bodhi.
This is correct, thank you for clarifying!
Oops,looks like I read it wrong.
It was a lot to read so it was easy enough to miss!