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First, that "You're beautiful." line followed by "That's because I'm so in love with you," then, "No, it's because I'm so in love with you." or whatever needs to go.
Second, as others have mentioned, Anakin's change from remorse over Mace Windu's death to proclaiming Palpatine as master is too abrupt and unbelievable. I would suggest cutting the scene right after Anakin is crying saying, "What have I done?" I would also eliminate the scene where he slaughters the younglings because it simply doesn't work. (Look, killing children is something I might do three days after joining the dark side - two days at the earliest. But certainly not within the first five minutes!)
In this reedit, we later see him fly to Padme and tell her how he's going on a mission (to kill the Trade Federation Viceroy) and restore peace. His motivation is hidden from us at this point, because we have not yet seen Palpatine declare him as Darth Vader, so we're unsure what he's planning. Then, we see Obi-Wan view the security recording of Palpatine. At that point there is a flashback cut to the actual scene of Palpatine declaring Anakin as Darth Vader. I think it works because even though the flashback picks up right after Anakin says, "What have I done?", our brain thinks there was a gap between the two moments and tries to fill it in with whatever dialogue our imagination can produce, making Anakin's transition to the dark side seem less awkward. Afterwards, when Anakin offers Padme the chance to rule beside him and overthrow the Emperor, we sense that maybe his motivation all along was to play along with Palpatine in an attempt to get out of this mess unscathed which he created for himself by attacking Windu.
I would also be curious if anyone has any idea on how to reconcile the Empire dialogue where Obi-Wan says, "That boy is our last hope." and Yoda says, "No, there is another." It certainly doesn't make sense if Obi-Wan was present at the birth. I suppose the easiest solution is to remove this exchange from Empire, but I always liked that final line from Yoda.