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Post #1077627

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SparkySywer
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Star Wars: The Anakin Saga
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Date created
20-May-2017, 12:44 PM

Damn, this is what I get for not coming on for a while. I’d be interested in seeing this if you’re still giving out betas.

EDIT

Here are my comments from watching it:

-2 hours and 50 minutes is pretty long.
-If you’re going to have an Episode #, I would make this Episode I, not Episode IV.
-The audio in the crawl seems a little compressed, but it might be my headphones, or maybe it’s just how the Blu-Ray version is and I’m used to Harmy’s Despecialized.
-The cut between the escape pod falling (~7:27) and the next shot is pretty abrupt. If you’re sold on that cut, what I’d recommend you extend the previous shot’s audio so they fade into each other.
-The first transition goes black and silent for too long. I’d have the music come in earlier, and the “32 years earlier…” come in almost immediately after the music starts.
-The audio there sounds kinda compressed too.
-I really like the color correction and film effects you did to TPM.
-Sidious’s dialogue is kinda obviously tampered with, especially “I want her…”. For that line I’d have it be said while you can’t see his face.
-Not a fan of the font you used for subtitles, but it’s no big deal either.
-Jar Jar’s dialogue is also clearly tampered with. I’d use a foreign dub of TPM to replace his dialogue, like Russian or Hindi (although decent quality Hindi dubs are hard to find). That’s what I did. Although, my personal recommendation is to cut the scene entirely.
-There are a few scenes from TPM that should be cut for time. Like the “I’m a person and my name is Anakin” scene, and Obi-Wan in the desert.
-In the transition between the crew leaving Watto’s shop and the ship scene, the audio totally cuts out for a second. Also, it should be a few frames quicker, and the previous scene’s video shouldn’t be translucent. Same with the next transition.
-The transition between TPM and ANH (dinner to garage) has too much lag time, too.

I couldn’t finish it because it’s pretty long. I’ll get around to finishing it, but I skimmed through and here are my comments on what you asked:

-No crawl for TPM is necessary. Just the one for ANH.
-Wipes were too slow. Wipes in my fanedits are about ~21 to ~27 frames long. Hover around there.
-It was absolutely a good idea to cut out C3PO.
-I love the low contrast and film effects, although maybe a little overboard in a few places.
-I would have used Harmy’s Despecialized instead of the Blu-Ray. That kinda bothered me, but I’m probably just really used to Harmy’s at this point. And it’s not a big deal if you like the Blu-Ray better as a source.
-Audio was a bit of a problem around cuts. The problem could be fixed by, whenever there’s a cut, fade in the audio from one side into the audio from the other.
-The audio feels compressed, although my headphones or computer just might be shite.
-I love the music added to the podrace, however there’s some music taken from AotC. One of my problems with that movie, and RotS, is that they reuse music from previous movies. Like literally use the same exact recording, even. If you’re gonna keep the AotC music, I recommend you remove that music from AotC.
-I don’t know what you mean by the Mos Eisley Droids Scene.
-Too many SE SFX.
-The flashback scenes are good foreshadowing. I like them.
-I like the new Alderaan explosion. The remains are a little weird, though.
-I like the new Death Star explosion, too, although the lasers lighting up should have came together, like in the Alderaan destruction.

As for the overall concept, I’m not entirely sure. It would work if you really put a lot of effort into tying TPM with AotC. Personally, I would have put AotC scenes in ANH, RotS scenes in ESB, and left RotJ on its own. But this can work, and I look forward to seeing it.