If it turns out anything like the Obi-wan sample you sent, that should work out nicely.
"5. Have Liam ADR dialogue similar to the script, then include #3 as well."
"Is that...legal?"
"Because, I don't understand why he decided to quit at that point. Well, I do, but the falling cape just doesn't impress."
I didn't quite get that reference. What does it mean? (To you, anyways.) I kinda wondered as to what prompted his "Into exile, I must go" line, so in that respect, you are right - putting the Qui-gon V.O. there would be an excellent idea.
BTW, MF. When you get to the lava part, please cut out all the shots showing Obi-wan and Anakin standing on the raft and droid. The close-ups are fine, but the parts showing them hovering around and floating are ridiculous. Hell, I'd almost consider having Obi-wan jumping directly from the huge arm down to the "high ground", but there's some crucial dialogue in the middle of all that.