Originally posted by: Trooperman
One change that I'm going to make, though, is one that will actually fit in better with your changes in place.

Anakin: It's all Obi-Wan's fault. He's jealous. He held me back!

This is much more significant because Anakin is directly saying that Obi-Wan kept him from saving his mother. Now, the anger that is building up towards Obi-Wan is making more sense.

Sounds good.

The next challenge for this new Anakin story is to get him to move his emotions smoothly from the funeral of his mother to the rescue of Obi Wan -- whom he kinda, sorta blames for the death of his mother.

The emotional journey of Anakin in this movie needs to be along these lines: A) Anakin feels confused and held back by not being allowed to act on his dreams B) Anakin falls dangerously in love with Padme C) Anakin lets loose his rage when he finds his mom dead D) Anakin lets Padme lead him to a kind of mature acceptance, if not peace.

So when Padme challenges Anakin to come with her to save Obi Wan, I wonder if it can become a kind of "awakening of the Force" scene. If Anakin can begin the scene, receiving Obi-Wan's message in a very down and defeated frame of mind (i.e. with sad music) -- a frame of mind which Padme pushes him out of. I think this could happen if she simply starts leaving to save Obi Wan without Anakin stopping her to discussing it as he does now. Their discussion has to happen differently. Anakin can listen as she says "He gave you strict orders to protect me and I'm going to save Obi Wan..." Then lay in some of the Force music before he smiles or get out of there without him smiling or...

Not sure that's a great solution, but I have to say-- having now seen Ep III -- Obi Wan and Anakin's friendship is real and awesome in the new movie. It should have it's roots in this one -- and it seems like Anakin has to make the journey from blaming Obi Wan to trying to transcend that point of view.

Other than that point, this edit fits beautifully as a set up for Ep III.

BTW, Ep III has visual design and sound cues for the dream you're trying to construct of Anakin seeing Shmi tied up. This is one change that will make Ep II and Ep III fit together better in quite a few ways.

I can't wait for you to see Ep III.