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New Force Awakens fan edit

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I have a few ideas about a possible fan edit I want to do for TFA and I wanted to run it by everyone, do you have any suggestions?
Adiwan’s fan edits gave me some thoughts.

I hated the opening crawl for several reasons, it was to brief, and it read like fan fiction, bad fan fiction, not to mention it was the wrong font, but I didn’t catch this until repeated viewing of the film.

The scene where the first order attacks the village and genocides it needs to be cut in my opinion the scene looked far to small scale and had far to much expository dialogue, and this dialogue was written with no subtlety.
I’m noticing this in alot of new movies is that some of these one on one scenes play out with expository dialoue and remind me of cut scenes from a video game no one wanted to buy.

I know that I want to make Captain Phasma male or eliminate Phasma completely from my cut of the film.
I also want to remove alot of scenes involving Kylo Ren throwing tantrums, I feel this detracts from the power of the villain, how can his character be in such a position of power? He’s like a man who shouldn’t be in power because he tweets insults at people who have discipline, but somehow managed to get there because he’s spoiled, this movie felt like more of a comedy than it did dramatic and I feel that Kylo Ren’s character was Kasdan not being able to resolve the identity crisis in the draft of the film that he flung at J.J. Abram’s empty skull.
I wanted to take the scene where Solo has to confront the space pirates on his freighter and replace the Irish marauder with a more battle scarred Boba Fett as well as possibly add Boba to the Bridge where Solo confronts Ben, also to replace General Hux with Fett at the end.
There are a handful of Hux scenes where I want to replace him with Grand Admiral Thrawn, I despise Hux, he’s far too young and doesn’t demand fear and respect from me.
Hux is a joke…
As for Han solo’s motive for wanting to see his son, Ben being revealed to be his son all through the film ruins the build up, there is no big surprise and takes to much away from the villain, I hate the identity struggle and I felt that Kylo Ren is at war with himself he can either be Ben or Anton Chigurh (I kept getting vibes Driver was trying to imitate Javier Bardem’s performace from “No Country for Old Men”, Anton Chigurh being symbolic of Cold Calculating Evil) the Sith lord with an identity crisis, bit would be more heartbreaking if we don’t see Ben’s lighter personality traits reveal themselves until Han Solo confronts him.
I want to see which deleted scenes I want to put back in to the film.
I also wanted to take the score from when Obi Wan dies in 4, and add it to the scene immediatly after Ren throws Solo off the bridge, starting with Chewey detonating the bombs and screaming in pain for the death of Solo.
The first scene with Snoke can be cut in half since the dialogue in that scene is redundant.
I wanted to borrow another idea from a fan edit, but with my own twist,
I want to add the deleted scene where the squadron jumps to warp, as they come out of warp that’s when the laser wave hit’s the capital, it would magnify that the new republic isn’t as competetant as it should be and magnify the tragedy of Solo’s death.
A good movie is like giving your girl an orgasm,
Most of the film is foreplay so you can build the audience up for a big climax and I want my audience to squirt.

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I can’t tell if this is entirely satire, serious, or half and half.

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Jeffgale26 said:

I hated the opening crawl for one reason, it was to brief, and it read like fan fiction, bad fan fiction, not to mention it was the wrong font, but I didn’t catch this until repeated viewing of the film.

I’m sorry, which was the one reason you hated it?

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Jeffgale26 said:

J.J. Abram’s hollow head.

Sounds reasonable.

Jeffgale26 said:

ya’ll

alot

dialoue

alot

ominiusness

Abram

Solo confront’s Ben

doesn’t demand fear and reslect from me.

ben

Anton Chigur

handull

Chewey

re incorporate

competetant

Sorry if I missed any.

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I’m using a phone that is to small for my fingers, I do better with a keyboard.
And I’m sorry I’m a Texan.

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Jeffgale26 said:

And I’m sorry I’m a Texan.

Actually it’s not that you used it, but that you put the apostrophe in the wrong place. It’s “y’all” because the apostrophe replaces the “ou.”

Anyway, serious question - how are you going to replace Hux with Thrawn?

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What’s John Hamm’s pricetage again?
I’ll have to find a local actor and shoot them in front of a bluescreen, then shoot myself, lol.
I have to get someone around 45 to 60 who has some decent acting chops then get them in front of a green screen.
I need to get a better than great costume and make them look better than a bad cosplayer and film some scenes.
I guess.
Just hope the composite shot looks good.
And I’ll remember the rule on Y’all, I usually have it down half the time.

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The title font in the crawl isn’t wrong, it’s just not the font used in RotJ and the Prequels.

(I’m limiting myself to one critique, and not going to point out how impossible character replacement is.)

(oops)

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On another note, I dig the identity struggle of Ben Solo.
With that being said, I hate the execution of it.

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doubleofive said:

The title font in the crawl isn’t wrong, it’s just not the font used in RotJ and the Prequels.

(I’m limiting myself to one critique, and not going to point out how impossible character replacement is.)

(oops)

I’m open to criticism, go ahead and let me have it.

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Jeffgale26 said:

doubleofive said:

The title font in the crawl isn’t wrong, it’s just not the font used in RotJ and the Prequels.

(I’m limiting myself to one critique, and not going to point out how impossible character replacement is.)

(oops)

I’m open to criticism, go ahead and let me have it.

And if my work sucks I’ll make a way, I’ll play with it for years until I figure it out.

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I assumed if I got the distances, angles, scene breakdown, lighting correct, and to some extent Lense settings I could make it work.
If I could get the other chroma issues right, they wouldn’t bother me.
Then construct mattes and scenes without the character and overlay.
If not then I’ve wasted my time learning something.

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I’m going to pretend this is all one big joke and then get on with my day.

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DominicCobb said:

I’m going to pretend this is all one big joke and then get on with my day.

I’ll do my work and then see if my mind was playing tricks on me.

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DominicCobb said:

I’m going to pretend this is all one big joke and then get on with my day.

Adiwan’s work is superb and I’ll see if I can’t emulate his capability for my project.

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Jeffgale26 said:

What’s John Hamm’s pricetage again?
I’ll have to find a local actor and shoot them in front of a bluescreen, then shoot myself, lol.
I have to get someone around 45 to 60 who has some decent acting chops then get them in front of a green screen.
I need to get a better than great costume and make them look better than a bad cosplayer and film some scenes.
I guess.
Just hope the composite shot looks good.
And I’ll remember the rule on Y’all, I usually have it down half the time.

Are you gonna edit Hux out of every scene he’s in? That’s a ton of work and will take a lot of skill to pull off. Do you have experience with that kind of editing?

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Jeebus said:

Jeffgale26 said:

What’s John Hamm’s pricetage again?
I’ll have to find a local actor and shoot them in front of a bluescreen, then shoot myself, lol.
I have to get someone around 45 to 60 who has some decent acting chops then get them in front of a green screen.
I need to get a better than great costume and make them look better than a bad cosplayer and film some scenes.
I guess.
Just hope the composite shot looks good.
And I’ll remember the rule on Y’all, I usually have it down half the time.

Are you gonna edit Hux out of every scene he’s in? That’s a ton of work and will take a lot of skill to pull off. Do you have experience with that kind of editing?

I didn’t want to edit him out of every scene, just several dramatic ones.
And no I don’t but I learn fast so I’m being very arrogant on the topic.
I want to use cinelerra.

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Jeffgale26 said:

DominicCobb said:

I’m going to pretend this is all one big joke and then get on with my day.

Adiwan’s work is superb and I’ll see if I can’t emulate his capability for my project.

adywan

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Jeebus said:

Jeffgale26 said:

What’s John Hamm’s pricetage again?
I’ll have to find a local actor and shoot them in front of a bluescreen, then shoot myself, lol.
I have to get someone around 45 to 60 who has some decent acting chops then get them in front of a green screen.
I need to get a better than great costume and make them look better than a bad cosplayer and film some scenes.
I guess.
Just hope the composite shot looks good.
And I’ll remember the rule on Y’all, I usually have it down half the time.

Are you gonna edit Hux out of every scene he’s in? That’s a ton of work and will take a lot of skill to pull off. Do you have experience with that kind of editing?

And one more thing, I learn most software by looking at it is a puzzle at first and force myself to learn the interface and techniques.
When I render that first shot and it looks like shit I’m going to fix it and go over it 100 times trying to see where I fucked up and how I can whip it into shape, and in 100 attempts if it still looks like shit, I’ll go over it 1000 times more.
Sadly the source is only 4:2:0,
Both my camera and the bluray, that is already a problem I’m anticipating.