I know you’re liking the place the crawl is in, and I don’t mean to try to throw a wrench in, but it seems quite like a missed opportunity to not mention the Starkiller in the revised crawl. One of my issues with TFA is that the base is poorly established and I feel like unfortunately, with this restructure, you’ve only exacerbated that issue, with the base’s operational abilities not clear until well past the halfway mark.
I don’t have a particular suggestion at the moment though (I’m not really that helpful, I know). Just something to think about.