Thanks for the feedback!
I can’t put my finger on why, but I feel better about “in secret” than "secretly risen from."
As far as “combat” goes, what I want to say is something to the effect of “The New Republic has refused to take action against the FO even though Leia presses them to.” “Combat” is the best word I could think to throw in there.
Post #1038612
- Author
- Hal 9000
- Parent topic
- TFA: A Gentle Restructure (Released)
- Link to post in topic
- https://originaltrilogy.com/post/id/1038612/action/topic#1038612
- Date created
- 24-Jan-2017, 8:44 AM