Here’s the new crawl. I am working on getting rid of the slight red flicker at the beginning. Very strange, and I don’t know what’s causing it!
https://vimeo.com/200772174
password: crawl
I assume you’ve removed the “last Jedi” since Episode 8 title is known ? Too bad, it was a cool way to finish the crawl. Otherwise the text is good, but I feel there is still room for a little improvement over the vocabulary used. “Fractured” for instance does not seem necessary since it’s already said “ashees”. Or maybe “Fallen Empire” ?