I’d be in favor of this. This project is a restructuring of the SKB plot, and so there’s no need to apologize for proposing suggestions related to it.
I’ve posted before about a née crawl, very similar to the original one, that includes a few political descriptors. The First Order rising “in secret,” and Leia “failing to convince the New Republic of this looming threat…”
I quite like that.
But there’s still the question of where to put the Leia and the Resistance scene since the Takodana sequence is quite short and also seems to take little time in universe. From what I can tell, all the Takodana scenes take place back to back 😕
About the Maz’s castle attack scene, here are the changes needed (as I see it now):
• Lone Star Destroyer
• Alternate music and sound
• “They’ve found us”Optional:
• Remove sunset TIE shot
• Regrade outdoor scenes to evening/sunset
• Change Maz’s line “Those beasts! They’re here.”
• Put back cool X-wing shots from trailers in the battleI tried the Kylo shuttle idea, it looks fine but doesn’t really work after all, so I’m on board with only the Star Destroyer. I’ll revise my edits and see what we get.
I think the regrading is a pretty cool idea and it’d allow us to keep the sunset TIE shot which is pretty cool, so I vote for that.
As I said before, I’d keep both of Maz’s lines.
And I wouldn’t put the trailer shot back in as there is a similar one in the movie and putting it in would require to add music and sound which would be a lot of work and would disrupt the original score. So I think there isn’t enough benefit for the problems is causes.