I would remove all the captions for locations.
Was the bit on Knowhere even necessary?
Haha, I honestly thought of Knowhere when I first saw it too, but I honestly just removing the location title cards would diminish that comparison a lot. If it is necessary or not is another issue though.
If anything I would add even more smashed up Jedi related buildings so the Death Star really can clear out something substantial.
Maybe that overhead shot of the U-wing and the giant Jedi statue could be reinserted? Wouldn’t make a big difference but it would add a little bit more to it maybe. Might be redudant though since the other shot of the same or similar statue is in Bodhi’s first scene.