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Post #1024333

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topdawg193
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Rogue One crawl
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27-Dec-2016, 11:21 AM

My first swing at a Rogue One crawl, contouring #1:


The Jedi are all but extinct, the Republic has crumbled, and the Galactic Empire’s terrible reign falls like a shadow over the stars.

A bold REBEL ALLIANCE dares to defy the imperial forces; but as fractures widen and hostilities escalate, conflict threatens to engulf the galaxy.

Deep in the Outer Rim, the dastardly Director Krennic has discovered the location of a long lost ally – one who holds the key to securing the Empire’s terrifying rule…


With my amendments, I wanted to:

1.) Communicate the precarious state of the galaxy at this juncture. The Rebels are scattered and disorganised - yet to become a unified opposition to the Empire - furthering unrest in the galaxy, and threatening any hope of peace.
2.) Cast Galen Erso as an old ally of Krennic’s, and not as an old friend. Secondary sources aside, there is scant evidence in the film of much friendship enjoyed between the two.
3.) Omit mention of the Death Star or any sort of imperial weapon, for the sake of aligning the audience’s discovery with that of the characters.

EDIT - Having taken some time to consider the crawl, I’ve worked up a second draft:


The Jedi are all but extinct, the Republic has crumbled, and the Galactic Empire’s terrible reign falls like a shadow across the stars.

Daring to oppose the imperial battalions, a bold REBEL ALLIANCE seeks to unite planets against the Empire. Division is rife, and conflict threatens to engulf the galaxy.

Meanwhile, deep in the Outer Rim, the ruthless Director Krennic has discovered the location of an old ally - one who holds the key to securing the Empire’s terrifying rule…