I have finished revising the screenplay. Among the fixes I mentioned above and some of Wannabe Scholar’s suggestions, I have made these changes to the screenplay:

I have renamed Bajilon Prime/the Bajilon system Townowi/the Townowi system.
I have added another Force-adept clone to the plot: THX-1138, SGW’s lover and co-conspirator.
I have removed Aayla Secura from the plot and replaced her with Tarkin.

I have modified the entries here to reflect this new draft. Sections of the script which WEREN’T noticeably/significantly modified were placed in quote blocks; portions which WERE modified lie outside the quote blocks.

The link to the pdf of the revised screenplay can be found in my signature below.