Even though it's a different recording, I don't neccessarily want to use the same popular song in more than one movie. At this point, though, I'm just listening to a lot of different stuff and considering some other SW stuff. But I do think I'm going to get a hold of that CD; I've heard of it before.
Anybody else who attempts an edit of Episode II after this will be hard-pressed to surpass yours I think, or at least come up with a cool title.
Thanks! Of course, they could just use mine as a template before improving it even more!
Now, I'm thinking that this is going to be the crawl:
Episode II
SHADOW OF THE DARK SIDE
Ten years after the election of Palpatine, unrest pervades the Galactic Senate. Several thousand systems intend to secede from the Republic.
These separatist traitors, under the leadership of the mysterious Count Dooku, have made it especially difficult for the limited number of Jedi Knights to maintain peace and order in the galaxy.
Pursued by ruthless assassins, Senator Amidala returns to Coruscant to vote on the critical issue of creating an ARMY OF THE REPUBLIC to support the overwhelmed Jedi....
And that page from Mr. Freeman has given me some ideas on a couple scenes, the 2nd scene from the beginning, in particular:
Rebel Scumb's version was:
Ki adi Mundi: He's a political idealist, not a murderer.
Mace: You know count dooku was once a jedi, he couldn't assassionate anyone, its not in his character.
Cut to close up of Mace: We're keepers of the peace, not soldiers.
Yoda looks at him then turns to the Palpy's desk as a hologram of a rodian appears.
My version plays out like this:
Ki adi Mundi: He’s a political idealist, not a murderer.
Mace: You know that Count Dooku was once a Jedi. He couldn’t assassinate anyone. It’s not in his character. Close-up. But if they do break away…
Palpatine: My negotiations will not fail.
Mace: If they do, you must realize we’re keepers of the peace, not soldiers. There aren’t enough Jedi to protect the republic.
Palpatine: Master Yoda, do you think it will really come to war?
Yoda: The dark side clouds everything. Impossible to see…the future is.
Also, the scene where Mace shows up at the arena. In Rebel Scumb's version...
Dooku: Master windu how pleasant of you to join us.
Mace: This party's over.
(but the other jedi do not appear)
Dooku: Brave, but foolish my old jedi friend, You're impossibly out numbered.
Mace: I don't think so!
Now the jedi army appears for a much better pay off, the music has also been redubbed, it is the triumphant music from when Luke first ignites his saber on the sail barge in RotJ.
Dooku: We'll see.
My version...
Dooku: Master Windu, how pleasant of you to join us. Pause. Cut away to Obi-Wan, Anakin, and Padme looking up hopefully. But you’re impossibly outnumbered.
Windu: I don’t think so.
Jedi ignite lightsabers. No reaction shot from Obi-Wan, Anakin, etc.
Dooku: We’ll see.
Also, I'm considering this exchange for my radically changed "forbidden kiss" scene:
Padme: We would swim to that island every day. I love the water.
Padme is chattering, Anakin’s bored to death. He wants to talk about other things.
Anakin: Padme…I love you. (in place of “I don’t like sand”)
Padme looks at Anakin.
Anakin: I’ve loved you ever since I first saw you, ten years ago. I was afraid to tell you before. But it’s true. (instead of “and smooth.”)
Padme: I can’t. Pause. It’s not possible…
Anakin: Why not?
Padme: That was forbidden for a Jedi.
Anakin: They wouldn’t have to know.
Padme: We’d be living a lie. I couldn’t do that. Could you, Anakin? Could you live like that?
Anakin: I’m sorry, Padme. You’re right. It would destroy us.
I am still very much rewriting this and trying to make it flow more smoothly, but that's a start. I have also deleted the scene with the floating pair (originally directly before the kiss scene), because I realized Padme is wearing different outfits in the two scenes. The scene was never that good to begin with, anyhow.
Thanks for all your support! I'm very excited that this could be becoming a collaborative project, with a few different people involved doing things I'm not capable of on my own.
Trooperman