Thanks for your thoughts, Scholar.

I’ll say your criticisms are certainly valid. Hell, I’ll even say I agree with you. The story did go off the rails following the Xuthltan incident, with too many unconnected character arcs going on and no central villain to take the stage. In trying to simplify the convoluted mess that was the earlier draft, I may have simplified things too much.

This screenplay has been a bit of a drag for me, and I’m not keen on going back to it, but I may have to. I’m a bit bereft of ideas on how to fix the problems you’ve noticed, though. If you’ve got any scenarios, feel free to run them by me; I’m eagre for creative input.