I like the fact that the movie has no crawl, so I’d keep that. But I’d replace the movie logo with a version that has filled letters and probably even the metallic design seen on the official poster. And I would probably include the “A Star Wars Story” as well.

I really love the movie, so the only other thing I’d do is to cut the R2 and 3PO shot as that one felt forced unlike the other cameos/easter-eggs.

And if I may suggest a bigger change, it would be that the Tantive IV is not inside the flagship but instead the plans are sent to the Tantive IV while it’s on course to Tatooine where Leia was sent to find Obi-Wan. But that would obviously require more editing and I don’t even know if it’s worth it.