I’ve been playing with Jackpumpkinhead’s custom crawl generator for TFA, and figured it would be worthwhile to encode new crawls for the prequel trilogy. I am not going to put out another version just for this, and have no plans to do so aside from using an eventual source by Emanswfan. However, I can go ahead and generate new crawls and lay them in place so they’ll be ready to go if that day comes.
I’ve redrafted a crawl for COD, and I’d like to get your feedback. Be as picky as pedantic as you can be.
Episode I
CLOAK OF DECEPTION
It is a time of decay in the Republic. Against the backdrop of dissidence and corruption, a menace lurks in the shadows of the galaxy.
Attempting to capitalize on the government’s complacency, the nefarious TRADE FEDERATION has seized the peaceful planet of Naboo with a blockade of deadly warships.
With the newly crowned Queen desperate for help, the Supreme Chancellor has secretly dispatched two Jedi Knights, the guardians of peace and justice in the galaxy, to end the conflict…
I really love the crawl! As with your 4.1 version of the crawl, I appreciate the focus being more on the lurking menace and less of the politics. I think this is an improvement over your last version mainly because of some richer vocabulary.