Tomo

The voice sounds good, but my feedback would be that the word “recharged” sounds a little strange, almost like 'rich’arged instead of 'ree’charged, though that might just be me (someone with an Oxford English accent). I also think a bit more urgency would fit the scene better, it seems qute relaxed as is. Very nit-picky stuff, but I thought I’d offer any feedback I could. Definitely not much room for improvement though!

I feel like this would add a lot to the threads, allowing people to see how other users feel about a comment. This could be useful in discussing fan ideas or suggestions to edits. e.g. threads such as ‘A Gentle Restructure’ often involve opinions and suggestions being put forward for the consideration of others, and simply viewing the likes/dislikes/upvotes/downvotes on a post is much simpler, and potentially more effective, than reading through multiple individual messages.

It would also add more interraction in threads, allowing users to like comments they agree with or find particularly interesting, helpful, funny, etc, or dislike comments that they disagree with or find offensive in any way.

I’m not sure if this suggestion has been brought up before but it is something I have been wanting in the time I’ve this website, hopefully there are others who agree.

I suspect the additional “emotional” Rey/Luke scene will come before the force skype call in which she says she’d rather not do this now, it seemed strange to me that she was so emotional here without explanation so that would make sense. I’m definitely looking forward to more stuff from that story line though, hopefully there are some scenes worth adding.

I’ve just got back from my second viewing, and I too was able to enjoy it a lot more this time. I think going into it initailly with such a clear idea of what I had expected and hoped would happen hindered my enjoyment. Going in without those feelings meant I could appreciate the twists and turns more.

That being said some of my initial cocerns have only been consolidated.

I can understand why Holdo wouldn’t initially tell Poe the plan if she didn’t trust him, but once he started risking lives and mutinying it makes no sense to me that she would still refuse to inform him of plan. It just feels like such contrived drama and poor writing, and I’m hoping it will be possible to remedy this somewhat with a fan edit.

There were many comedic moments that I feel could be removed, as well as some clunky dialogue, though this appears to be something everone else is already thinking.

The crawl seemed a little off to me as well, the third paragraph starting with “But” didn’t seem right. I plan on messing around with moving the ending of TFA to the start of this film to see how that could work.

Just got back from watching the movie for the first time, and I’m not sure how to feel about lots of it. One thing I am sure of is that I’ll be fan editing the shit out of it as soon as I can, and I’m interested to hear what opinions other fans have.

Share your ideas for fan editing The Last Jedi, things you liked, things you didnt like, and ways to fix them.

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@Jackpumpkinhead - Looks great to me, nice work. Just a small suggestion, but maybe you could make the destroyer a bit darker in colour to be more in fitting with the style of the first order ships, and differentiate it from the old Imperial version.

Cool that sounds like an interesting idea, good luck with your edits.
Yeah please that would be great😃

Also, can anyone give me suggestions on where to find TFA edits to watch? I haven’t found any so far.

ImperialFighter said:
Tomo, after we see and hear the ships overhead, I guess you’re just cutting from Rey turning and starting to run back through the woods with BB-8, directly to the shot of Maz leading Han, Finn, & Chewie to the lightsabre, and then directly to Rey & BB-8 finishing off running through the woods towards the ‘palace’ then?

Yeah that’s how I felt it worked best, given that you already see that the TIEs are advancing when Rey watches them overhead, I didn’t think the shot showed you anything you didn’t already know.

Although it kinda looks as if it’s more suited to the sun-drenched Jakku setting, the shot shows about 5 TIEs approaching, whereas only 2 TIEs arrive for the ‘air strike’ during that sequence.

Damnit, I hadn’t noticed that until you mentioned it and now it’s bugging me haha. I suppose it’s not too far a stretch of the imagination to assume that the TIEs split up and some of them lost the Falcon. Finn’s mention of how staying low confuses their tracking could explain this. I don’t know which is more distracting though, since the whole of the Takodana sequence takes place in broad daylight with blue skies apart from that one shot.

I’m curious to know where you’ve decided to place it though, as the dialogue of the trooper calling in the ‘air strike’ unfortunately overlaps slightly into the current next close-up shot of Rey & Finn continuing to run, so doesn’t seem to fit there without some ‘audio manipulation/tweaking’ to work perfectly. Another place I looked at putting it, was at the point a little after that, where Rey & Finn are inside a tent, and begin to hear the TIEs for the first time. Perhaps you slotted it in just after the point they are listening in close-up…and then after the ‘Apocalypse Now’ shot, you then continued as Finn grabs her hand and she tells him to let go of her? Either way, I’m interested to know.

I put it in straight after the trooper called them in and blended the audio. I tried to insert it into the tent scene as you mentioned, but the dialogue is a bit fast and there isn’t really an appropriate place to cut away that doesn’t seem distracting.
I see your point, for me it works better in Jakku but it’s a compromise either way.

Concerning your issue with the jarring nature of the ‘Apocalypse Now’ shot, I had similar feelings and tried removing it from that sequence and replacing it in Jakku after the Stormtroopers call in an air strike on Finn and Rey. I was unwilling to lose the shot entirely but didn’t like it’s usage in the original edit, and so I felt both sequences benefited from the change.