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#1038972
Topic
TFA: A Gentle Restructure
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Hal 9000 said:

Here’s another revision of the crawl that I rather like. This one will probably be what I go with.

Episode VII
THE FORCE AWAKENS

Luke Skywalker has vanished. In his absence, the sinister FIRST ORDER has risen in secret from the ashes of the fallen Empire.

Failing to convince the New Republic to combat this emerging threat, General Leia Organa mobilizes a covert RESISTANCE to gather allies from the farthest reaches of the galaxy.

Desperate for her brother’s help, Leia has sent her most trusted pilot on a daring mission to Jakku, where a clue has been discovered to Luke’s whereabouts…

I like this crawl, my only critisisms would be is that the middle paragraph seems to read as though it is in the present, where all of the other crawls sounded as though they were happening in the past, until the last paragraph.

Also, I’m not a big fan of the crawl using first names and saying that she is desperate for her brothers help. I think just saying that she is desperate for help, and calling her “General Organa” and Luke just “Skywalker” would fit better with the OT.

But I do like the mobilizing a Resistance bit, and calling Poe her most trusted pilot.
Just my 2 cents

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#1036826
Topic
TFA: A Gentle Restructure
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bromeo said:

Jackpumpkinhead said:

…removes all references to Kylo being a skywalker until the end.

Waaait a minute… you know something we don’t? 😛

you do know that you dont have to have the skywalker name to actually be a skywalker. Just because my last name may be Smith, and my mother was a Jones, doesnt mean I’m not a Jones.

How does everyone keep forgetting that Kylo’s mother is a Skywalker, which means he is also a Skywalker. Sorry for the rant, this just drives me mad.

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#1036416
Topic
TFA: A Gentle Restructure
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Hal 9000 said:

I’ve been thinking about the rathtara. Not sure at this point.

Personally, I enjoy the rathtar scene. The only problem I have with it is Finn surviving an encounter with them. If that could be cut I would be happy with it.

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#1036414
Topic
TFA: A Gentle Restructure
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Wow, how this edit has grown! I am loving all of the changes so far for version 2. I think it will probably be the version that I will be working from for my own personal edit that removes all references to Kylo being a skywalker until the end. Keep up the great work everyone!

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#1036400
Topic
STAR WARS: EP V &quot;REVISITED EDITION&quot;<strong>ADYWAN</strong> - <strong>AVAILABLE NOW</strong>
Time

adywan said:

And the painted Wampa mask placed (roughly) onto the inner skull. Now to finish painting the mouth and then start applying the fur, paint and attach the horns and finally glue the mask to the inner skull

I would like to echo the sentiment posted by previous users here. This is quite impressive/horrifying! I am afraid that when I see the final edit I won’t be able to get this thing out of my head 😃
Thanks for all of your hard work, you have truly inspired many here, and no doubt will continue to inspire many to come. As has been neurotically expressed by the likes of users such as jedimasterobiwan, we are all anxiously awaiting the release of what will be the definitive version of one of the greatest films of all time for most of us. After following this project for several years it is fulfilling to finally see the light at the end of the tunnel.
Thank you again for everything you have contributed to this community.

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#1034904
Topic
OT member Custom Box Set project thread
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i think this is a great thread! a lot of you have been saying that you print your discs with a canon pixma printer, but i am not sure what pixma printer is the best/actually prints on a disc. could someone please point me in the right direction?

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#1029788
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ronwlim's custom bluray cases/box set
Time

this is some of the most beautiful cover work i have seen, i love it.

i am curious as to your technique for making the box. i am planning on making my own box for each of the trilogies and i would love any and all insight you could lend.

thanx

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#1027196
Topic
Rogue One: A Star Wars Story - FanEdit Ideas <strong><em>SPOILERS</em></strong>
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Kexikus said:

Jackpumpkinhead said:

since i am in the “no crawl for Rogue One” camp and i was disappointed in the hideous opening title card (Jason Ward of Making Star Wars said it looked like someone made it in MS Paint 5 minutes before the movie was released, and i have to agree with him) i decided to make my own title card. The following video is a mockup of the title card that was in the film and then i made 4 title cards of my own. i am trying to decide which one i like best for my inevitable edit of this film. let me know what you all think.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2qt3OVPpjAs

Really well done!

One minor thing: In the movie, there is also movement of the camera through the starfield, so that it’s not static. I really liked that effect and would like to see it in the reworked title crawl as well.

Now for the title itself: I really like the turning letters as in some of the trailers, but I would prefer if the title went away from the camera instead of coming closer. And I’d make that movement start earlier while they’re still turning or at least fade it in slower, since right now the turning and the movement afterwards seem very disconnected.
I also liked the idea of the “mirrored” lines appearing around the title itself but I wouldn’t go with STAR WARS: ROGUE ONE but keep the original title/logo with ROGUE ONE: A STAR WARS Story since I like the focus on Rogue One instead of Star Wars in the title and I’d keep it this way for the title card.

So my personal favorite would be number 4 with the official A Star Wars Story logo and a receding title.

I will do a mock up of this and see what it looks like. I don’t know if I like the “a Star Wars story” subtitle. I honestly hope they do away with it in the future. I added the “Star Wars” logo so that the supposed audience would know that this was a Star Wars movie, but obviously not an episode.

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#1026164
Topic
Rogue One: A Star Wars Story - FanEdit Ideas <strong><em>SPOILERS</em></strong>
Time

since i am in the “no crawl for Rogue One” camp and i was disappointed in the hideous opening title card (Jason Ward of Making Star Wars said it looked like someone made it in MS Paint 5 minutes before the movie was released, and i have to agree with him) i decided to make my own title card. The following video is a mockup of the title card that was in the film and then i made 4 title cards of my own. i am trying to decide which one i like best for my inevitable edit of this film. let me know what you all think.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2qt3OVPpjAs

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#1021588
Topic
Rogue One: A Star Wars Story - FanEdit Ideas <strong><em>SPOILERS</em></strong>
Time

The Aluminum Falcon said:

Seen the film for the second time. Really digging it and feel there’s a lot of fanedit potential. Like or hate TFA, the problems cited against it are so inherent to the film that they can’t really be removed with a fanedit.

Rogue One, on the other hand, just has some bad scenes that can be removed, so it’s ripe for us. 😃

My suggestions-

  1. Don’t start in space, no need since crawl was axed. Possibly also remove “A long time ago…”
  2. Cut opening for cringy child acting and blue milk throwaway shot.
  3. Put scene of Jyn waking up in the present day to before the logo, clearly indicating the transition in time. This possibly reframes the opening scene as a dream, as it appeared to be in the trailer.
  4. Replace oddly cheap-looking logo with nicer trailer logo.
  5. After logo, first scene should now focus on Cassian killing informant.
  6. Move first scene of Bodhi on Jedha to after Jyn and Cassian leave Yavin, in order to avoid excessive planet hopping. Follow it up directly with scene of Saw interrogating him. This means the audience never has to “leave Jedha” immediately after getting there the first time.
  7. Reinstate “I Rebel”? Or at very least make ending of briefing scene less awkward. An alternative would be to have the final exchange be “Is that clear?”; “Yes, sir,” also from teaser.
  8. Cut Cantina Fellows on Jedha.
  9. Cut Psychic Alien monster; no real pay-off in the long-run
  10. Trim Tarkin stuff throughout; camera lingers too long and performance is somewhat weak.
  11. Cut first Vader scene at Bast Castle in its entirety because of poor performance vocally and physically. Better to save Vader for final scene at end.
  12. Take out some of “odds” jokes, which grow excessive.
  13. Cut 3PO and R2D2.
  14. Radical, weird alternate ending idea I had! 😄 (not actually sure how well this would work):

But… instead of ending on a CGI Leia, have the Star Destroyer chase the Tantive, as per the opening shot of SW77, then cut to the deleted scene of Luke watching from the surface of Tatooine. Iris out on a close-up of Luke’s face, as he puts down the binoculars. This would require restoring the deleted scene to an acceptable level of quality, though it could be nice to bring back the “Luke’s theme” musical cue from SW77.

In any case, I feel ending on Luke would do a more clear job of concluding the film’s theme of hope- personifying it, as he is literally “A New Hope” instead of having another character simply say the word. Also, looking at bigger picture placement within the saga, it’s a nice changing of the guard from Vader, shown in close-up, to Luke, who would end the film in close-up. There’d also be an added bit of symmetry with Force Awakens, both ending on Luke.

Of course, we may have a bunch of deleted scenes to work with, as well! Though, my suspicion is that the reshot 3rd act is radically superior to the original.

Freak’n love this, especially the end, and i think it is totally possible to pull off. there was a user on here that was working on restoring all of the deleted scenes starting with the Luke scene.

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#1020132
Topic
Rogue One: A Star Wars Story - FanEdit Ideas <strong><em>SPOILERS</em></strong>
Time

For me I think not having a crawl was good. It established that this was not and “episode” movie, but something different, yet still Star Wars. The beginning did need some work though. Something felt missing from the beginning. Instead I think the title card could be improved and I would definitely change the music that goes along with it. Or maybe even add it to the beginning after “A long time ago…” and then jump right into the movie.

I would also change the constant jumping from planet to planet in the beginning, removing the planet titles with it. The scene with Cassian right after the title card at the city between two asteroids I think can be removed, it doesn’t really add anything to his character and it makes him seem like a really bad guy. I understand that they are trying to get across the fact that in a war there is a lot of grey area and sometimes you have to do bad things for the greater good, but I feel that shooting a man in the back is just taking things a bit too far. It makes it hard for the audience to believe that he is a good guy and makes the scene where he decides not to shoot Galen unbelievable.

I think merging a lot of scenes in the movie especially in the beginning would make the movie flow better. Everything leading up to Yavin seemed kind of disorienting and messy to me.

I would definitely cut the mind reading monster from the movie, and much of Saw as well. I would leave him to be a bit more mysterious. I also didn’t like the voice that Forest Witicker used, it seemed over the top to me, so cutting a lot of his lines would help. Especially the “Save the Rebellion, save the dream” line. If maybe there was a way to restore his blue eyes, that would be kinda neat to see.

As awesome as it was to see Mustafar and Vader in the bacta tank, I thought the conversation between Krenic and Vader was unnecessary, and I’m not sure if I like the force choke pun. Also possibly pitch shifting Vader’s voice to sound more like ANH Vader would be nice if left in. I think the only time I personally would show Vader is the final scene.

The flashback on Coruscant, the R2 and 3p0, and the Ponda Boba and Evazan cameos were not needed as well. As much as I liked Baze and Chirrut characters I think their intro could be toned down a bit. Finally I would change Cassians decision to not shoot Galen and instead just have him get distracted by seeing Jyn on the platform.

After watching it a few more times I may have more cuts.

Just my 2 cents

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#1012419
Topic
Star Wars prequel edits
Time

ray_afraid said:

As someone who artistically re-purposes old things into new things almost daily, I know what you’re getting at. But the “trash” has to have some value in it to redeem. The PT doesn’t have that.
Besides, like I said the PT is crap, not trash. And nobody’s turning poop into anything people wanna see. Frink has turned the poop into a joke, so there’s that. But turning poop into a good movie? Not possible.
You can add the purest and cleanest water to mud, but all you’ll get is more mud. You can also take the sicks and rocks out, but it’s still mud.

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#1011507
Topic
SW fonts
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I am looking for the font that is used in TFA for the alien subtitles. I think it is ATF Alternate Gothic bold, or heavy. If anyone has these can you pm me please

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#1006425
Topic
Project Threepio (Star Wars OOT subtitles)
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Is it possible for someone to send me just the fonts for this project. I am working on an edit and would like to try to match the subtitles of Greedo and Jabba for my prequel edits.

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#1006027
Topic
Custom Crawl Creator: Revisited (A Free Blender Project for Fan Editors)
Time

A while ago Adywan posted this video:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=F51kdD6raUc

This video highlighted what the crawls for his Revisited saga would look like and how they were all going to follow the same timing and correcting the problems After Effects had with antialiasing on the crawl once it got too far away in the distance. This got me to thinking “I want my crawls to match Ady’s”. So with some scouring the internet I found that our own DigiModification had done some work in Blender, and came up with a project file that can be freely downloaded and used to create your own custom crawl. However, this project came with some limitations and would only output the crawl itself and the crawl that it made was not in line with Adywan’s. So, I took it upon myself to recreated what Ady had done using Blender instead of 3DSMax.

With my project the output is not only very close in timing, but this project also outputs everything from the “A long time ago…” text and the “Star Wars” logo. As of right now this project is not available, however I will be releasing it as soon as I have the guide finished.

But as a way to hold you over here is a quick comparison video I made of the original video Ady posted and my project showing how close I have been able to get. Ganted, its not perfect, but i think it is as close as you can get.

hope you all like it

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HXeeKIy8Wn4&feature=youtu.be

*Jedit
This project is now available. PM me for a link.

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#998406
Topic
STAR WARS: EP V &quot;REVISITED EDITION&quot;<strong>ADYWAN</strong> - <strong>AVAILABLE NOW</strong>
Time

doubleofive said:

Jackpumpkinhead said:

I asked this question earlier and I think it kind of got glossed over, but I was wondering if the 3ds max project could/would be made available so as to create custom crawls that will fit in with the revisited series? I would really appreciate it. Thanx

That’s up to our 3D guy Andreas. I’m sure it’ll show up eventually.

is there a way to get ahold of said “3D guy Andreas”?

or if not that at least could you tell me the fonts you used for the crawls so that i might be able to recreated the technique myself?

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#997925
Topic
Star Wars Episode II - Attack of the Republic
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Jeebus said:

I’d love to see a full list of changes.

The VFX did look a bit gamey when up close, but I couldn’t tell a difference with the wide angle shot.

i may put out a full list of changes in the future, but as of now i have no plans for such. my process for doing this scene is a little antiquated, but as i said in the first post, it gets the point across. i have plans to do TPM, and with that i am playing around with the idea of adding Dooku to TPM by replacing Sidious with him. I have a few ideas that may correct the “gamey” look. if my tests pan out i will eventually replace the scene in this edit with this new technique. thanks for downloading and taking a look at it.

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#997396
Topic
Star Wars Episode II - Attack of the Republic
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Jeebus said:

You had me at

original Special FX

Downloading now, but it’s taking a long time 😕

Yeah, sorry. I am seeding on my work computer and the connection is really slow. Hopefully after enough people get it, the speed will get better.

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