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#1571163
Topic
The Rise of Skywalker: Ascendant (Released)
Time

Here is a stab at cleaning up the other lines…


“Why did the Emperor come for me? Why did he want to kill a child? Tell me.”

"Because you were a threat to him once his spirit claimed another host. All his clones were… Rey, you have his power. You are a Palpatine.

"The sole reason for your creation was to be one of his vessels. But what Palpatine doesn’t know is that we’ve become a Dyad in the Force, Rey… two that are one. Together we can end him, and finally let the past die.

(Removes his helmet)

“You know what you need to do. You know.”

“I know.”

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#1571160
Topic
The Rise of Skywalker: Ascendant (Released)
Time

Guys… I love this. If we can get it implemented seamlessly… holy crap for V5!!!

As for one of the lines… I think this sounds a little more natural and less “Basil Exposition-y”

Your parents saught out Luke’s protection, searching the Jakku desert for his allies… but Palpatine’s assassins caught up to them, they wouldn’t say where you were… so he gave the order.

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#1569818
Topic
The Rise of Skywalker: Ascendant (Released)
Time

@Octorox, I highly agree.

There is some time for an unmasked Kylo AI line to be added right after Rey falls and drops the Wayfinder and Kylo picks it up. This time could be used to help sell the idea of her using her inner darkness with the blade to reveal the path to the Wayfinder.


Kylo: “Embracing the darkness…

Rey ignites her lightsaber…

Kylo: That’s the only way the dagger tells. Look at yourself. You wanted to prove to my mother that you were a Jedi but you proved something else. You can’t go back to her now, like I can’t."

Rey: “Give it to me.

Kylo: “The dark side… is in our nature. Surrender to it.

Rey: “Give it… to me.

Kylo: “The only way you’re getting to Exegol… is with me.

Rey: “NoOoOo!

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#1569798
Topic
The Rise of Skywalker: Ascendant (Released)
Time

Hal 9000 said:

And I like that new 3PO line idea! “I do believe I am some sort of… spy.” Perfect.

https://www.101soundboards.com/sounds/6919407-i-do-believe-i-am-some-sort-of-spy

I’m sure @JarJar’s AI line would sound better though.

Also, is it worth revisiting the line used to replace “Rey’s first mission” now that more emotion can be added to the lines? The “very important mission” line does sound a little flat in its current form.

https://www.101soundboards.com/sounds/6919441-artoo-did-you-hear-i-am-going-with-mistress-rey-on-a-very-important-mission

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#1569736
Topic
The Rise of Skywalker: Ascendant (Released)
Time

@RogueLeader, I love the idea of changing the inscription altogether. It always seemed odd to me that it is an “Ancient Sith” dagger, but then when they read Ochi’s inscription he added to it, it reads like Google Maps instructions. “Take a left turn at Endor, go to this exact latitude and longitude.” 😄

The only issue with your version, is that Finn’s line right after is: “The Endor System… where the last war ended.” So, we need to have some kind of line that Finn can pick up on in order to say that.

Embrace your darkness, and this blade will guide you.
Follow its whispers and it will show you what you seek.
The dark path begins where the last war ended.
Only this blade tells. Only this blade tells.

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#1569730
Topic
The Rise of Skywalker: Ascendant (Released)
Time

Hal 9000 said:

  • Anything else we can do about the dagger? And I wonder about reinstating it being depicted as her parents’ murder weapon; it was removed to allow for greater clarity that it can mystically reveal directions to the wayfinder.

Are we able to generate lines for Sith 3P0?

“The Emperor’s wayfinder is in the Imperial vault. At delta 3-6, transient 9-3-6, bearing 3-2, on a moon in the Endor system. From the southern shore. Only this blade tells. Only this blade tells.”

“The Emperor’s wayfinder is in the Imperial vault. At delta 3-6, transient 9-3-6, bearing 3-2, on a moon in the Endor system. Give in to your darkness. This blade will lead you. Only this blade tells. Only this blade tells.”

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#1569640
Topic
Unusual <strong>Sequel Trilogy</strong> Radical Redux Ideas Thread
Time

Nev, I adjusted the lines around a bit and I think it accomplishes the same goal but reads a little better in my opinion


Kylo: “Rey… wherever you are… You are hard to find."

Rey: “You are hard to get rid of.”

Kylo: “I pushed you in the desert because I needed to see it… I needed you to see it… who you are. I know the rest of your story, Rey.”

Rey: “You’re lying.”

Kylo: “You were right… your parents were no one. You knew they were never coming back.”

Rey: “Don’t!”

Kylo: “You lied to yourself… but that only made your hate stronger.”

Rey: “I don’t want this!”

Kylo: “You hated them for it.”

Rey: “No!”

Kylo: “But you couldn’t live with your hate.”

(Cut Rey’s vision of her parents…since they are nobodies.)

Kylo: “Rey, I know how your parents died.”

Rey: “Stop talking.”

(Cutaway to heroes capture)

Kylo: “They were found by one of the Emperor’s agents. He wanted to know where you were… but they were too drunk to remember.”

(Cut vision of Rey’s parents getting killed.)

Kylo: “So that’s where you are. You know why the Emperor’s always wanted you, I’ll come tell you.”

Rey: “Why did the Emperor come for me? Why did he want to kill a child? Tell me.”

Kylo: “He never wanted to kill you, he saw what you would become… the most powerful host for his corrupted soul.”

Kylo: “Palpatine told me to kill you, but I know the truth. YOU are his true prize. There is darkness in you Rey, far more than me. But we can end this. We can end him, Rey… together.”

(Removes his helmet)

Kylo: “You know what you need to do. You know.”

Rey: “I know.”

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#1568861
Topic
The Rise of Skywalker: Ascendant (Released)
Time

Nev beat me to it while I was writing my response haha. Luke cut himself off from the force and couldn’t see the whole picture. The “raw strength” he sensed in Kylo (Snoke) is the same he briefly sensed in Rey (Palpatine). It wasn’t until Leia started to train Rey that she put it together that she had PapaPalps™ power

It’s like poetry…

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#1568859
Topic
The Rise of Skywalker: Ascendant (Released)
Time

Part of it that we’d need to be careful about… Leia didn’t know Palpatine was alive until the start of the movie, but knew of Rey’s lineage BEFORE then… god this movie is filled with plot holes, because if Leia knew of Rey’s past then she would know Palpatine was still alive! UGH

What if… it was because Leia sensed the strength of Rey’s abilities/powers once she started to train her. Because in TFA/TLJ isn’t around Rey when she uses the force much. And, it doesn’t rely on Luke having to tell her


Luke: “Because you’re a Palpatine? Leia sensed his power in you after I passed.”

Rey: "She didn’t tell me. She still trained me…”

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#1568851
Topic
The Rise of Skywalker: Ascendant (Released)
Time

A little tongue-in-cheek, but…


Luke: “What are you most afraid of?”

Rey: “Myself.”

Luke: “Because you’re a Palpatine? Leia sensed it too, after I ascended…”

Rey: “She didn’t tell me. She still trained me…”

Luke: “Because she saw your spirit, your heart. Rey, some things are stronger than blood…”

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#1567496
Topic
The Force Awakens: Starlight (V1.1 Released!)
Time

Just thinking…

  • Redo Poe’s Illum line
  • Maybe cleanup/redo Finn’s: “It’s the First Order, they’ve found us line.”
  • An angry line for Poe about making the First Order pay after the destruction of the Hosnian System (helping to explain why they are continuing the assault)
  • Potential line for Lor San Tekka (or Kylo) clarifying that it isn’t a map that Luke left to find him, but a map that leads to an ancient Jedi Temple where Luke may be, clearing up the confusion on why Luke would leave a map if he didn’t want to be found.
  • Maybe some kind of line before Rey leaves to find Luke about starting an evacuation soon because the First Order is coming to D’Qar to counterattack.
  • Any Leia exposition lines that could be on comms during the Starkiller X-Wing battle?
  • A Maz Kanata line about having to leave soon to go settle a union dispute (TLJ connection)
  • Over the loudspeaker at the Resistance base in the background “Rose Tico, please report to maintenance.”
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#1566095
Topic
The Force Awakens: Starlight (V1.1 Released!)
Time

DZ-330 said:

The only spot/spots I could see it working would be from (1:51:47 - 1:51:52), so that gives us 4 secs for a quick Poe line.

Poe: “We need to make them pay!

Pilot: “We just lost Red 1.

Pilot 2: “We’re overwhelmed. What do we do it isn’t working?

Pilot 3: “Black Leader, there’s a brand new hole in that Oscillator. Looks like our friends got in.

Poe: “Red 4, Red 6, cover us… everybody else hit the target hard give it everything you got.


Or, we could trim Pilot 3’s line since the camera cuts to the Oscillator midway through his line:

Pilot 3: “Black Leader, there’s a brand new hole in that Oscillator.

Poe: “Let’s make them pay! Red 4, Red 6, cover us… everybody else hit the target hard give it everything you got.

JarJar, had to track it down but I remember posting about that very thing before haha!

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#1565920
Topic
STAR WARS: EP V &quot;REVISITED EDITION&quot;<strong>ADYWAN</strong> - <strong>12GB 1080p MP4 VERSION AVAILABLE NOW</strong>
Time

Jedi122 said:

I’m really curious, Ady. How did you manage to so seamlessly replace the Han in Carbonite mold with the one you created into the movie itself without using any CGI?

From what I’ve seen… recreating camera angles and lighting, plus intensive rotoscoping! Crazy stuff but it looks amazing when completed!

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#1565867
Topic
The Force Awakens: Starlight (V1.1 Released!)
Time

EPISODE VII
THE FORCE AWAKENS

It is a time of despair.
Luke Skywalker, sworn
to rebuild the legendary
Jedi Order, has vanished.

With the Jedi now facing
extinction, agents of the
evil FIRST ORDER have
risen from the shadows
of an Imperial fortress
to claim supremacy over
countless worlds beyond
the fragile New Republic.

Growing restless amid
endless debate, daring
Senators have secretly
commissioned the pilots
of a brave RESISTANCE
to find the last Jedi and
restore the light of hope
to the darkening stars….