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#1140537
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TFA: A Gentle Restructure
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If having them jump into hyperspace without solid coordinates and getting thrown out soon after allows for the jarring scene change of the theatrical version to be removed, I’ll side with your version every time! The scene change in the original was so abrupt I have no clue how they let that slide.

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#1140530
Topic
TFA: A Gentle Restructure
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I like that theory, but the Falcon had already passed through Irving Boys, Ducain and Unkar as Rey later states, so the last hyperspace coordinates may be nowhere near Han. I like to think that she would know where Hosnian Prime was and that Rey would try to take Finn and BB-8 there, but they slipped out of hyperspace on the way. If it is able to be done, it can give us some more word of the Republic early on, however it would be nearly impossible to implement based upon the available footage.

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#1140521
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TFA: A Gentle Restructure
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I noticed something small in the edit that prompts a new question. After they escape Jakku in the Falcon, where do Rey and Finn jump to in hyperspace? The OT established that coordinates for hyperspace needed to be entered in the Nav Computer. I know it’s nitpicky, but if Rey never left Jakku and since she does not know where the Resistance base is, how would she know where to go?

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#1140136
Topic
TFA: A Gentle Restructure
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Not a problem, even though I’m not very active on the forums, I have been following your edits since V3 of your prequel trilogy. They have now become my replacement versions. I am looking forward to your cut of TFA. Great work as always!

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#1139402
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STAR WARS: EP VI -RETURN OF THE JEDI &quot;REVISITED EDITION&quot;<strong>ADYWAN</strong> - <strong>NOW IN PRODUCTION</strong>
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DZ-330 said:

I made a quick mock up of what the ending of ROTJ:R might look like since Ady confirmed that the final scene will be Luke and Vader.

Video Link:
https://vimeo.com/246201394

Password:
fire

Sound effects were added in and the ending music from ROTS was used to streamline the mock-up. I’m not too sure where the force ghosts could be edited in but I’m sure Ady will think of something.

I figured I’ll bump this up as it fits the current discussion better that when I originally posted it. I think it will be hard to implement the ghosts in the scene since Luke doesn’t look anywhere else besides the pyre in the shot. As for the celebration, it would seem odd that Luke just has Vader’s body stored some place until after he parties and then goes back later on to burn it. I’m not sure how that will be addressed.

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#1139274
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STAR WARS: EP VI -RETURN OF THE JEDI &quot;REVISITED EDITION&quot;<strong>ADYWAN</strong> - <strong>NOW IN PRODUCTION</strong>
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I made a quick mock up of what the ending of ROTJ:R might look like since Ady confirmed that the final scene will be Luke and Vader.

Video Link:
https://vimeo.com/246201394

Password:
fire

Sound effects were added in and the ending music from ROTS was used to streamline the mock-up. I’m not too sure where the force ghosts could be edited in but I’m sure Ady will think of something.

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#1108975
Topic
STAR WARS: EP VI -RETURN OF THE JEDI &quot;REVISITED EDITION&quot;<strong>ADYWAN</strong> - <strong>NOW IN PRODUCTION</strong>
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Jani-wan said:

DZ-330 said:

Reworking the first paragraph of the original crawl can fix the reordering of the Tatooine and Dagobah scenes.

STAR
WARS

EPISODE VI
RETURN OF THE JEDI

Luke Skywalker has returned to
the planet of Dagobah to continue
his training as a Jedi Knight.
Meanwhile, his friends have located
Han Solo at the lair of the vile
gangster Jabba the Hutt. But he
left his friend hanging on the
wall for six month…

Meanwhile Darth Vader went to
Tatooine to set a trap for Luke
knowing that he will show up
to save his friend. Vader
waited five month but Luke
never showed up leaving his
friend hanging on the wall

Vader finally left to report
to the Emperor, who sent him
to speed up to construction
of the new armored space station
more powerful, then the first
Death Star … when Luke
finally showed up.

Fixed it 😉

Let’s set ROTJ a month or so after ESB with the reordering, the crawl could still work. Lando and Chewie found Han within a week or two and Lando applies and gets a job at Jabba’s to have an inside-man. Luke got word of Lando’s plan and went back to Dagobah to confront Yoda and Ben about Vader being his father on his way to Tatooine, he needs to know for sure. Leia gets restless waiting for Luke to get there and decides to go in with Chewie and get Han out herself. Luke senses this and leaves for Tatooine right away. The movie then continues as originally scripted.

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#1108957
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STAR WARS: EP VI -RETURN OF THE JEDI &quot;REVISITED EDITION&quot;<strong>ADYWAN</strong> - <strong>NOW IN PRODUCTION</strong>
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Reworking the original crawl can fix the reordering of the Tatooine and Dagobah scenes. A new crawl entirely isn’t really needed.

STAR
WARS

EPISODE VI
RETURN OF THE JEDI

Luke Skywalker has returned to
the planet of Dagobah to continue
his training as a Jedi Knight.
Meanwhile, his friends have located
Han Solo at the lair of the vile
gangster Jabba the Hutt.

Little do they know that the
GALACTIC EMPIRE has secretly
been building a new armored
space station even more powerful
than the first dreaded Death Star.

When completed, this ultimate
weapon will spell certain doom
for the small band of rebels
struggling to restore freedom
to the galaxy…

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#1105793
Topic
Episode VIII Discussion *SPOILER THREAD*
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Could it be possible that when Luke went to look for the first Jedi Temple he crashed landed on Anch-To with no means of contacting anyone? Notice the underwater X-Wing in this Topps card: https://i.imgur.com/qAslnbf.png. He probably had no parts to repair it and if he tried to reach out to Leia with the force then Snoke could block it out. In the Aftermath novels she claims something dark was surrounding her unborn son, it could be likely that the dark force that Snoke was surrounding Leia/Ben with was also blocking Leia’s force abilities. Leia feeling Han’s death in TFA could be explained because of Snoke worrying about Starkiller Base imploding and not focusing attention to Leia. After all, Snoke’s plan has been about keeping Luke out of the fight so removing his force connection to his sister would be a priority. Snoke does not know where Luke is but has managed to tear apart the connections to his family. Luke hasn’t been hiding but has instead been trapped on Anch-To. Rey and the Falcon is his way out, but since he has been living here for 2-3 years and learned a great deal about how he was trained incorrectly as a Jedi due to the ancient books he finds on the planet could be why he is reluctant to leave as he has given up hope for Ben and his abilities in this time. The whole “Map to Luke” could and has been explained more as a map to Anch-To using Imperial records and would explain that Luke didn’t leave a map since in this theory he was trapped there with no way back. It may make Luke look a little silly being that he went so far away without a backup plan to get back instead of him abandoning his family and friends in the wake of Ben becoming Kylo Ren. But then again, Luke has always been a little bit silly with his actions (ex. throwing his lightsaber away in the finale to ROTJ) so it fits his character.

Thoughts?

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#1041392
Topic
Opening Crawl for Star Wars: The Last Jedi
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MagicStingRay said:

STAR WARS

EPISODE VIII
THE LAST JEDI

Chaos has engulfed the galaxy. The destruction of the REPUBLIC leadership has allowed the dreaded FIRST ORDER to spread across the galaxy, as thousands of star systems are left to defend themselves against this growing threat.

Aiming to combat this evil, the brave RESISTANCE fighter Rey has traveled to contact Jedi Master LUKE SKYWALKER, the last hope against the agents of evil who seek to destroy him.

Driven to find Luke and end the Jedi once and for all, the dark lord Kylo Ren has arrived to a remote sanctuary in the frontiers of space, seeking to complete his training…

This one sounds official! I too hope that the film opens with a Kylo scene then cuts to Rey and Luke.

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#1038859
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Opening Crawl for Star Wars: The Last Jedi
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Since “The Last Jedi” will pickup right where “The Force Awakens” left off, what is your opinion on what the opening crawl could be? Below is the one I have written for Episode VIII. If you have written one, please share!

STAR
WARS

Episode VIII
THE LAST JEDI

Tragedy has struck the New
Republic. After the deaths of
millions caused by the First
Order’s sinister Starkiller Base,
tensions are growing strong
within the RESISTANCE.

Little do they know that
Supreme Leader Snoke is about
to begin training Kylo Ren
in the dark secrets of the
FORCE. With this ancient
knowledge, the Resistance will
stand no chance against them.

General Leia Organa has sent Rey
to retrieve her brother, Luke
Skywalker, from his self-induced
exile, as he is the last hope to
save the galaxy from the treachery
of the First Order…

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#1035060
Topic
STAR WARS: EP V &quot;REVISITED EDITION&quot;<strong>ADYWAN</strong> - <strong>AVAILABLE NOW</strong>
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I have been tracking this project since SW:R was released and I first heard about it online. I don’t care how long it takes, the hiccups it has, or how much us fans will need to donate. ESB:R will be the definitive edition of this movie and I am willing to wait as long as needed for Adywan to finish this to the fullest of HIS vision. You should be as well. We are almost there guys, just a little longer. I feel this just needs to be said because of a certain group of people saying they are being scammed or that this project is taking too way too long. Be thankful that you are actually going to get it; I know it will be awesome. May the Force be with us all.

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#1023195
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Rogue One: A Star Wars Story - FanEdit Ideas <strong><em>SPOILERS</em></strong>
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darthrush said:

I think I have decided that my favorite crawl is the created by writer/reporter Andrew Shackley:

The Jedi are all but extinct, the Republic has fallen and in their wake, the Galactic Empire has engulfed the far reaches of the galaxy in fear.

Persecuted members of the Old Republic have been thrust into hiding. Only members of the REBEL ALLIANCE dare take a stand against the ruthless Imperial forces.

Deep in the Outer Rim territories, the dastardly Director Krennic has discovered the location of a long lost friend; one capable of completing the Empire’s most powerful weapon yet…

The first paragraph establishes the fall of the jedi, the fall of the Republic and the rule of the Empire. This is what you need for full galactic exposition. Then in the second paragraph it establishes who the Rebels are and how they came about. The last paragraph introduces you to Galen and Krennic while hinting at the superweapon in development. I prefer keeping it a mystery for the movie to take you on.

I like this one a lot, I hope when the fanedits come around, because I know they will! I hope they make it say ROGUE ONE instead of STAR WARS. I feel that helps differentiate it enough from the main saga and it would be a cool way to start the spinoff films, and a good call back to 1977 Star Wars original crawl without an episode title. I may do an edit myself unless I find a good project when the time comes around. I already did a hybrid of Empire and Jedi similar to Q2’s since I couldn’t find a download at the time. We’ll see though.

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#1023178
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Rogue One: A Star Wars Story - FanEdit Ideas <strong><em>SPOILERS</em></strong>
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darthrush said:
It’s pretty good. I think that imperial scientist works best as Galen’s description. What I’m getting from all these crawls is that the first paragraph establishes the tyranny of the Empire since the Jedi have fallen. The second paragraph has varied for everyone. And the third paragraph explains how Krennic is searching for Galen.

True, science officer makes it sound too much like Star Trek, I feel stupid for not noticing that beforehand haha

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#1023171
Topic
Rogue One: A Star Wars Story - FanEdit Ideas <strong><em>SPOILERS</em></strong>
Time

Hi guys, I’m new to the site. I just edited an opening crawl yesterday, what do you think:

https://drive.google.com/file/d/0B1leS6nxMIzmQl9CZ01xVm5JaXc/view

A long time ago in a galaxy far far away…

ROGUE
ONE

Six years have passed since the
Galactic Empire tightened its grip
on the galaxy. Hope is fading, fear
is everywhere.

Fearing his family’s lives are at
risk, Galen Erso, a science officer
for the Empire, has fled to the
small remote planet of Lah’mu
with the help of Saw Gerrera, a
Rebel extremist.

Desperate for Galen’s valuable
research, Orson Krennic, director
of the dreaded DEATH STAR
project, has recently discovered
Galen’s location and has been
sent to retrieve him…

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