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This is my first project I will release to the public (exept my old ANH edit but I cancelled that). This edit will include many fixes etc., but I will also adjust the storyline a bit.
This is the list of changes the final version should have (I probably make some new changes when moving along):
1.The original 20th Century Fox logo IS BACK Restored and remastered
2.Removed the DVD plate and restored the "A long time ago, in a galaxt far far away..." plate.
3.The opening crawl now calls: STAR WARS: EPISODE III: REVENGE OF THE JEDI (I don't know if I will keep the Episode III title)
4.Brightened and sharpened the overall image.
5.Flipped back 3 flipped shots of Boba Fett in Jabba's Palace.
6.Removed the shots of Boba flirting with some slave girls.
7.Overblow the brightning off Luke's hologram, and made it more blue like the holograms in the other movies. It looks pretty good in my opinion, but I might restore it back to its original state.
8.Fixed a shot where C3PO is almost completly silver.
9.Fixed a goof where a protocol droid (can't remember his name) right eye almost doesn't light up while the other one is bright.
10.NO MORE JEDI ROCKS!!
11.Because I removed Jedi Rocks, we directly cut to Oolya getting killed by the rancor, but this may change since I may will put Lapti Nek back in (my Moth3r ROTJ disc broke a few days ago and I didn't have a back-up off it)
12.Remember hearing Greedo's dialogue in Jabba's Palace? It not thier anymore! I'm trying to remove it and remix it so I have some new dialogue to mix in to replace the missing Greedo dialogue.
13.To match the thermal detonator in Star Wars Battlefront II, I added a slight red glow to Boosh's thermal detonator when its activated.
14.I burned Jabbas dialogue into the video, using a font that matchs the font used in the original 1983 theatrical run.
15.I might slightly edit Jabbas dialogue in the subtitles.
16.When Chewie is brought to his cell, we hear the doors close, but we don't see them move. I'm trying to fix that.
17.Fixed a color issue that made it look like it was a jumpcut with that wierd creature that we see when looking at Jabbas Palace at late night.
18.Edited a few things of the control panel of Han's carbinite block.
**19. Luke's saber is back blue again
19.Fixed Boba's jetpack to look like jetpacks in the PT. This really annoyed me for some time
20.You now see sabertracks on the people Luke kills.
21.I left the CGI sarlacc. The new beak never really annoyed me
22.Seriously brightened Artoo and Treepio when Luke picks them up from the sand. It was really obvious that it was filmed infront of a matte painting or blue/greenscreen, because the painting was way brighter then the sand or the droids.
23.Re-rotoscoped the Falcons engine glow almost troughout the entire movie. The DVD turned the blue glow into a brown/yellow/white glow.
24.I darkened the Emperor arrives scene.
25.Made Ben's ghost a bit more blue. It really annoyes me that the 2004 DVD made them almost completly yellow/white.
26.Han no more says "This can be a little rough feller don't want to speak for ya". Hey, he manoevers like a crazy man tru an asteriod field, but he is afraid of a simple mission on Endor. I wonder what GL was thinking when he wrote that line.
27.Shortened the discussion between Lando and Han about the Falcon. Some dialogue was really cheesy.
28.Same for the "I wonder if I will see her ever again scene".
29.No more "Vader is on that ship" dialogue from Luke. Luke now just feels the dark side of the force on the Executor, but he isn't sure.
30.No more code sequence, we directly cut to "Should I hold" etc.
31.Removed and shortened some Ewok scenes.
32.Removed the "Han-jealous" () scene. It really annoyed me.
33.The rebels now find the shield bunker themselfs.
34.Why are almost all Corellian Corvettes in SW red? I changed some to green and blue.
35.The little ewok now steals that speederbike on request of the rebels, so no more "Their goes or suprise attack" lines.
36.That little ewok now gets killed by the Imperial troops chasing him.
37.Darkened the Emperors chamber, but brightened the lights.
38.Fixed the shots of the BOE when they look tru the window.
39.The Emperor didn't forsaw the rebels attacking Endor, but he did forsee the attack of the rebel fleet.
**40.One or two ships explode when the rebel fleet finds out the deflector shield is still operational.
40.Fixed Vader's pink saber.
41.When Vader trows his saber to Luke it comes tru the right end.
42.Removed the shot of the Ewok that survives a blast from the AT-ST and starts crying because his friend didn't survive.
43.Fixed some crappy lasers and some bad explosions.
44.Fixed a silver Treepio shot on Endor.
45.Edited and moved around some dialogue of Vader during the final duel between him and Luke.
46.No more crappy rings when the secon Death Star explodes.
47.Vader has his eyebrows back!!
48.Removed Naboo from the end celebration.
49.Welcome back Sebastian Shaw as Anakin Skywalker
50.Putted originaltrilogy.com in the ending credits
51.Putted Suzy Rice in the ending credits, for creating the SW logo
52.Putted Sluggo, MagnoliaFan and Jaxon's Dad in the ending credits, for helping me out with the opening crawl

Things with ** are things I ain't sure of doing.

I'm also planning to make alot of changes to the audio mix but I didn't want to post them right now, since I still have alot of work to do.
The only thing I can't really manage to make is HIGH RESOLUTION version of my opening crawl. If you could/want to help me out, please pm me
I might have this thing finished in October/November, but it depends on the amount of homework i'll get this year

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Interesting. I'm glad to see the musical numbers gone. I've always disliked the idea of a big musical number in the middle of the action. It really kills the pace of the movie.

-TheSluggo
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Originally posted by: Master Skywalker
(Sorry for double post) I wondered, do you guys mind if I call ROTJ Episode III instead of VI? I'm tired of all that PT sh*t so I just wanted to remove any trace of them and be SW about SW like it was meant to be

MS


I agree with Magnolia Fan. It is your call. Personally, until they came out with the PT, I never really noticed the episode numbers. The only thing about making it episode III is that unless you are going to do something with SW and ESB, you have III-ROTJ, IV-Star Wars, and then V-ESB.
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I'm planning to do SW and ESB so that wouldn't be a problem. I just wanted the start with ROTJ to warm up and gain better skill, then I do ESB and then (I hope) my skills are high enough to do SW, because that really requires the most drastic and biggest changes (I already did alot of work on SW, but I'll make a back-up of this for later). I actually like both Episode III and VI tags, thats why I asked But I think I will stick with the Episode III tag

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I already did My new ROTJ crawl:

Episode III
Revenge of the Jedi

The rebellion is doomed. The GALACTIC EMPIRE is about
to finish the construction of a new armored space station,
even stronger then the first dreaded DEATH STAR.

While the rebel fleet is regrouping to form a GREAT
REBEL FLEET, Luke Skywalker, the last JEDI KNIGHT
alive, is returning to his homeplanet of Tatooine to
rescue rebel general HAN SOLO from the cluthes
of the vile gangster JABBA THE HUTT.

Its a hard time for the remaining freedom fighters,
that are trying to restore justice and freedom to the
galaxy, and the empire is preparing for the final
battle . . .

I think its better but the end needs a little work. Any ideas are always welcome

MS





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Sounds like it could be very interesting. Especially the blue saber.
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Originally posted by: Master Skywalker
I already did My new ROTJ crawl:

Episode III
Revenge of the Jedi

The rebellion is doomed. The GALACTIC EMPIRE is about
to finish the construction of a new armored space station,
even stronger then the first dreaded DEATH STAR.

While the rebel fleet is regrouping to form a GREAT
REBEL FLEET, Luke Skywalker, the last JEDI KNIGHT
alive, is returning to his homeplanet of Tatooine to
rescue rebel general HAN SOLO from the cluthes
of the vile gangster JABBA THE HUTT.

Its a hard time for the remaining freedom fighters,
that are trying to restore justice and freedom to the
galaxy, and the empire is preparing for the final
battle . . .

I think its better but the end needs a little work. Any ideas are always welcome

MS


I'd change "While the rebel fleet is regrouping to form a GREAT REBEL FLEET" to:
"While the scattered remnants of the Alliance are regrouping to form a GREAT REBEL FLEET."

Also "homeplanet" should be two words.

"Its" should be changed to the contration "It's," or better yet, split up the contraction to "It is."

Maybe the last bit could read:

"It is a perilous time for the remaining freedom fighters
struggling to restore peace and justice to the galaxy,
as the Empire prepares the ultimate weapon for the final
battle..."

EDIT: Here's my version of your crawl:

The rebellion is doomed. The GALACTIC EMPIRE is nearing
completion of the construction of a new armored space station,
even more powerful then the first dreaded DEATH STAR.

While the scattered remnants of the Alliance are regrouping
to form a GREAT REBEL FLEET, Luke Skywalker, the last of
the JEDI KNIGHTS, is returning to his home planet of
Tatooine to rescue rebel general HAN SOLO from the clutches
of the vile gangster JABBA THE HUTT.

It is a perilous time for the remaining freedom fighters
struggling to restore peace and justice to the galaxy,
as the Empire prepares the ultimate weapon for the final
battle...
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Thx, if you want will I put you in the ending credits My english is good but not perfect (I'm belgian). This my new crawl:
Episode III
Revenge of the Jedi

The rebellion is doomed. The GALACTIC EMPIRE is about
to finish the construction of a new armored space station,
even stronger then the first dreaded DEATH STAR.

While the scattered remnants of the Alliance are regrouping
to form a GREAT REBEL FLEET, Luke Skywalker, the
last JEDI KNIGHT alive, is returning to his home
planet of Tatooine to rescue rebel general HAN
SOLO from the cluthes of the vile gangster
JABBA THE HUTT.

It is a perilous time for the remaining freedom fighters
struggling to restore peace and justice to the galaxy,
as the Empire prepares the ultimate weapon for the final
battle . . .
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Originally posted by: Master Skywalker
I already did My new ROTJ crawl:

Episode III
Revenge of the Jedi

The rebellion is doomed. The GALACTIC EMPIRE is about
to finish the construction of a new armored space station,
even stronger then the first dreaded DEATH STAR.

While the rebel fleet is regrouping to form a GREAT
REBEL FLEET, Luke Skywalker, the last JEDI KNIGHT
alive, is returning to his homeplanet of Tatooine to
rescue rebel general HAN SOLO from the cluthes
of the vile gangster JABBA THE HUTT.

Its a hard time for the remaining freedom fighters,
that are trying to restore justice and freedom to the
galaxy, and the empire is preparing for the final
battle . . .

I think its better but the end needs a little work. Any ideas are always welcome

MS


I think I would make the verb usage more active, so it should read, for example, "the Galactic Empire is completing construction of..." Also the last sentence ought to reflect what is beginning the movie, so ou should mention Vader arriving to finish construction on schedule.
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Coolness. I edited my previous post to show what my version of your crawl would look like. Yours looks good. You can use my version or keep what you've got. You can give me credit if you want or not. Up to you.
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Originally posted by: Sluggo
Originally posted by: Master Skywalker
I already did My new ROTJ crawl:

Episode III
Revenge of the Jedi

The rebellion is doomed. The GALACTIC EMPIRE is about
to finish the construction of a new armored space station,
even stronger then the first dreaded DEATH STAR.

While the rebel fleet is regrouping to form a GREAT
REBEL FLEET, Luke Skywalker, the last JEDI KNIGHT
alive, is returning to his homeplanet of Tatooine to
rescue rebel general HAN SOLO from the cluthes
of the vile gangster JABBA THE HUTT.

Its a hard time for the remaining freedom fighters,
that are trying to restore justice and freedom to the
galaxy, and the empire is preparing for the final
battle . . .

I think its better but the end needs a little work. Any ideas are always welcome

MS


I think I would make the verb usage more active, so it should read, for example, "the Galactic Empire is completing construction of..." Also the last sentence ought to reflect what is beginning the movie, so ou should mention Vader arriving to finish construction on schedule.


Edited the last sentence:
It is a perilous time for the remaining freedom fighters
struggling to restore peace and justice to the galaxy,
as the Empire prepares its fleet for the final
battle . . .

Now it doesn't reflect the beginning anymore and I nearly need to edit the crawl text

MS
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Here's something I threw together pretty quick.
Just a tightened up version of your crawl, incorporating a few more elements of the original film's crawl.
Probably something along the lines of the crawl I'll use on Jedi.

The rebellion is doomed. The
Galactic Empire is nearing
completion of a new armored
battle station, even more powerful
then the first dreaded DEATH
STAR.

While the scattered remnants
of the Alliance are regrouping,
Luke Skywalker, has returned
to his home planet of Tatooine
to rescue his friend Han Solo
from the clutches of the vile
gangster Jabba the Hutt.

It is a perilous time for the
small band of rebels struggling
to restore peace and freedom
throughout the galaxy...

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This looks an interesting re-edit as Jedi would be the one IMO, would need the most rediting out of all the original trilogy films, will you be doing the same type of re-editing for the other films in the trilogy like this, one point if you are de-prequellizing in your edit you may want to remove Coruscant in the end celebration aswell as that is a prequel-tie in change...
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Love the blue saber. It fits the mood of the final duel's setting, and it hearkens back to those simpler days when good=blue, bad=red. (and the Revenge trailers/posters)
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Yea but i'm having trouble rotoscoping the blue saber. For ANH and ESB, I just need to put a new blade ontop off another blade, but somehow it doesn't want to work that way. I first need to rotoscope my saber, but then their is still a small green glow, I need to desaturate all greens in that scene, and if necesary I need to recolor all green objects in that frame to make everything look good again. I only have this bug in the final battle(i'm happy their aren't many to non green objects in that sequence), but its easier on Jabbas Sail Barge.

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I can't wait for this. It sounds awesome.

Here's a couple ideas though:
Make all the Endor scenes a bit darker and possibly a little bit foggy. Just to give more tension to the battle.
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Originally posted by: Master Skywalker

Episode III
Revenge of the Jedi

The rebellion is doomed. The GALACTIC EMPIRE is about
to finish the construction of a new armored space station,
even stronger then the first dreaded DEATH STAR.

While the scattered remnants of the Alliance are regrouping
to form a GREAT REBEL FLEET, Luke Skywalker, the
last JEDI KNIGHT alive, is returning to his home
planet of Tatooine to rescue rebel general HAN
SOLO from the cluthes of the vile gangster
JABBA THE HUTT.

It is a perilous time for the remaining freedom fighters
struggling to restore peace and justice to the galaxy,
as the Empire prepares the ultimate weapon for the final
battle . . .


A few things you need to edit:

- you have misspelled 'clutches' -- you're missing a 'c'.

- it should be 'stronger thAn', not 'stronger thEn'.

- Star Wars crawls usually end with an ellipsis and a period -- so four dots, not three.


A few things you should consider:

- 'stronger than' is a weak construction. Jaxon's Dad's suggestion of 'more powerful than' sounds better to this native speaker. I would suggest even 'larger than' sounds more natural than 'stronger than'.

- 'about to finish' is also a weak construction. Again, Jaxon's Dad's suggestion of 'is nearing completion of' is better.

Basically, Jaxon's Dad's edits sound like they were written by a native speaker of English, while yours don't quite. Your turns of phrase are a bit clunky. You're still doing far better in English than I'd ever do in French or Flemish, but I'm just sayin'...
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Originally posted by: MagnoliaFan

Luke Skywalker, has returned
to his home planet of Tatooine


FYI, you don't need that comma after 'Skywalker'. In fact, it's wrong to have it there. And, as I mentioned to Master Skywalker, I think SW crawls end with four dots, not three.

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You are right they end with four dots not three.


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