- Time
- (Edited)
- Post link
What follows are reedit possibilities I jotted down while rewatching The Force Awakens. I’m liking where this is heading, but always welcome feedback and new ideas.
STORY SETUP:
- The Knights of Ren are the trigger: New Republic/Resistance leaders fear the rise of a counter-order of Dark Jedi – therefore enlisting Force-users becomes a top priority
- Consider a prologue that immediately reveals Ahch-To, Luke, the Knights of Ren, and possibly Snoke’s first dialogue with Ren
- Crawl: since Poe later says to Finn, “You completed my mission,” it should be mentioned in the crawl that Jakku is Poe’s last undercover stop
CUTS/ALTERATIONS TO TFA
- Look for stormtrooper stuff to use as backstory for Finn (use training clips from Kurt Russell’s Soldier?)
- Trim dialogue between Poe and the old man; don’t show him handing an object to Poe
- Cut Poe removing drive from the bag when he gives it to BB-8
- Cut Ren’s mention of the map when grilling the old man
- Cut Ren’s line to Poe: “The old man gave it you.”
- Cut interior of Rey’s Star Destroyer scavenging
- Cut Rey’s cleaning of her wares
- Cut Rey’s food prep; keep exterior AT-AT shot, cuz that’s when she discovers the droid
- Cut Ren to Poe: “I didn’t know we had the best pilot in the Resistance onboard”
- Could start with “Comfortable?” - but it might be possible to jump straight to Ren’s Force-probe of Poe’s mind
- Keep Rey and droid going into the market - but cut her near-sale of the droid
- Cut Poe’s mention of the map to Finn when they’re in the TIE fighter
- Cut Ren to Hux: “I want that map. Get it.”
- Market: Cut Finn’s mention of the map to Rey
- Trim pauses in Finn and Rey’s fleeing from the FO troops
- Cut Ren’s temper tantrum?
- Trim Rey-Finn-Han dialogue to avoid “map to Luke Skywalker”
- Cut the entire rathtar scene (Chewie’s blaster injury must likewise be omitted or obscured)
- First Snoke scene: cut his mention of Luke Skywalker and “the last Jedi”; cut “your father” - can it be trimmed so that ONLY “your father” is omitted? (This could possibly also go into the Prologue)
- Cut Han’s recounting of Luke and the Jedi; jump from Rey’s “I bypassed the compressor” to Han’s “You want my help? You’re gettin’ it”
- Cut Han’s job offer to Rey
- Cut Resistance informant: ''Alert the Resistance: their missing droid is here" (???)
- Cut Ren’s “grandfather”
- Cut Maaz’s “map to Luke Skywalker”
- Enhance Rey’s Force-vision to imply she could be Han and Leia’s daughter
- Maaz and Rey: cut Maaz’s mention of Luke’s lightsaber, because in the reedit nobody has previously talked to Rey about Luke Skywalker; cut Maaz’s mention of Rey’s parents “never coming back”; cut mention of Luke’s possible return (this whole exchange could be cut; just show Rey taking off in a panic)
- Cut outsiders’ view of Coruscant being destroyed - how could they see it?
- Cut Maaz encouraging Finn to use the lightsaber
- Cut Han’s apparent unfamiliarity with the bowcaster
- Cut Finn’s “That is one hell of a pilot!”
- Cut Ren’s “The map - you’ve seen it”
- Cut Ren’s “Forget the droid. We have what we need” (to Kylo, Rey is just another Force-user he can round up; if BB-8 contains Poe’s cataloguing of Force-users in multiple locations, then Kylo would still want the droid)
- Trim Han-Leia reunion so that it seems they’re still together (actually their whole dialogue could be cut; just end it with them looking at each other)
- Cut Resistance leaders talking about the map to Luke
- Trim R2D2 scene to avoid mention of the map
- Cut Han and Leia’s HQ dialogue? If not, severely trim it.
- Trim Rey-Ren interrogation – or cut it altogether; don’t want Ren’s helmet off; don’t want him mentioning Han as a father-figure (Can I insert Luke meditating here?)
- Cut entire second Snoke scene?
- Insert Luke meditating ahead of Rey’s escape?? - Would imply that he’s reaching out to her and in fact is the one who set her free (this way she’s not so much of a “Mary Sue”)
- Trim or cut Han and Leia’s pre-mission dialogue
- Cut Rey skulking through the base (???)
- Cut Finn to Han: “Why are doing this?” (the up-nod)
- Cut pilot’s “Watch out for ground fire”
- Closeup of Rey when Han dies
- When Ren appears in the woods, can I use the trailer clip of him lighting his saber
- Cut short Finn’s attempt to fight Ren
- Cut short Rey’s attempt to fight Ren (but this has to be timed with the destabilization of the planet): they’re about to duel but then the quake hits and they’re separated
- Cut or crop Leia’s ignoring Chewie
- Cut all discussion of locating Luke
- Last scene flows directly into first Ahch-To scene of TLJ
