Prequel Trilogy script editing and redub thread.

Hey guys i thought i would create this thread just so editors could have some ideas for dialogue changes in scripts. Give a place for people would have ideas and can put them to paper (or should i say on screen). I would like to give an example of something i would like seen done in Episode 3:

PADME: I don't believe what I'm hearing . . . Obi-Wan was right. You've changed.

ANAKIN: I don't want to hear any more about Obi-Wan. The Jedi turned against me. Don't you turn against me.

PADME: I don't know you anymore. You're breaking my heart. You are going down a path I can't follow.

ANAKIN: Because of Obi-Wan?

PADME: Because of what you've done . . . what you plan to do. Stop, stop now. Come back! I love you.

ANAKIN: (seeing Obi-Wan) Liar!

PADME turns around and. sees OBI-WAN standing in the doorway of the Naboo Cruiser.

PADME: No!

ANAKIN: You're with him. You brought him here to kill me!

PADME: NO! Anakin. I swear ... I ...

ANAKIN reaches out, and PADME grabs her throat as she starts to choke.

OBI-WAN: Let her go Anakin... let her go!

ANAKIN releases his grip on the unconscious PADME and she crumples to the ground.

ANAKIN: You turned her against me.

OBI-WAN: You have done that yourself.

ANAKIN: You will not take her from me.

ANAKIN throws off his cloak.

OBI-WAN: Your anger and your lust for power have already done that.

OBI-WAN flings off his cloak.

OBI-WAN: (continuing) You have allowed this Dark Lord to twist your mind until now . . . until now you have become the very thing you swore to destroy.

They circle each other until OBI-WAN is near PADME. He places his hand on her.

ANAKIN: Don't lecture me, Obi-Wan. I see through the lies of the Jedi. I do not fear the dark side as you do. I have brought peace, justice, freedom, and security to my new Empire.

OBI-WAN: Your new Empire?

ANAKIN: Don't make me kill you.

OBI-WAN: Anakin, my allegiance is to the Republic ... to democracy.

ANAKIN: If you're not with me...

OBI-WAN: I will do what I must.

(ignites his lightsaber)

ANAKIN: You will try.

ANAKIN ignites his lightsaber.

He also cut Obi-Wan's absurd response: "Only a sith deals in absolutes."

Akwat Kbrana said:

He also cut Obi-Wan's absurd response: "Only a sith deals in absolutes."

 Indeed, i wanted to show Obi Wan being more stronger in his points, get rid of silly dialogue. Had to post the beginning because i wanted to see how it would all pan out and for you guys to judge too. I have posted previous reeditted versions of TPM with Jar Jar speaking in alien language and speaking about how Naboo drove them to the edge of existence and Trade Federation, seen as Gods to the Gungans are coming down to take revenge on the humans. Jar Jar being the only one who realises these are not gods try to convince rest of the gungans that they are just here to destroy everyone. Then later the gungans realise this is true, join with the humans and fight the Trade Federation. Then the celebration at the end is the joining of two races.

That, plus the fact that the PT consistently portrays the Jedi as absolutists and the Sith as relativists, thus rendering Obi-Wan's comment not only philsophically self-defeating ("only a Sith deals in absolutes" is an absolute statement), but also demonstrably incorrect and hypocritical.

On the other hand, if you deleted every line of dialogue that felt "forced and out of place," you'd wind up with three very short movies. ;)

Haha well i do plan on editing the whole script and will send to people who wish to have copy.

DuTwan said:

Haha well i do plan on editing the whole script and will send to people who wish to have copy.

I want the original not a copy ;)

-Angel