I’ve tried editing the following scene a bit. I’ve removed the sunset TIE shot (replaced with a wipe), removed Maz saying “those beasts”, tightened up her giving the lightsaber to Finn and rescored most of the scene with some more “urgent” music since they know TIEs are approaching. The rescoring and cutting of the sunset shot also get rid of a part of the music that was inserted earlier when Finn spots the TIEs.
Once again: Very well done.
I would remove the wipe though since usually those are used to go to a completely different location or to show that a larger amount of time has passed. And none of that is the case here. Additionally it didn’t look right to me.
The only other thing: The “They’re here.” shot seems a little short to me. There’s probably nothing that can be done about it but I wanted to let you know.
And while it’s a shame that the TIE sunset shot had to go I didn’t miss it at all when watching your little edit and it didn’t really fit in this scene anyway.
@Hal:
I remember that at one point you did some tests with pilot reaction shots for the Starkiller sequence in the end. Since I haven’t seen your V1 edit: Did you use those in the end?