Lloyd is indeed terrible in that scene (that’s not his fault, Lucas did’nt give a s*** about actor’s direction and was obviously lacking an actor coach. He eventually hired one on Episode III, which explains why most of the movie actually works pretty well in spite of awful dialogues). I like 3PO’s lines (Anthony Daniels is always great - only his Geonosis scenes of Episode II truly suck - and the animation is good), but Lloyd’s lines + his acting are lame here. Hal has removed the most offensive parts (“my best paaaaaaal”, oh gosh I almost forgot about this…). I think you should consider a trimmed version of Hal’s: the exact same edit without the “i’m going in a spaceship” (which is true but also very dull to say). However the scene itself has no real purpose, so you could remove it entirely (if you do so I would advise you to add more lines to the goodbye scene with the mother, otherwise the emotional heart of the movie would seem too rush). This is up to you, and keep in mind that you’re trying to assemble your own perfect cut, if you think something doesn’t belong and is too painful for your ears and eyes, just remove it 😃