DuracellEnergizer said:
Well, I just skimmed through part of that Aftermath excerpt, and it felt like I was reading a bad R. L. Stine novel dictated by William Shatner.
Any lingering hopes I had of the nuEU turning out better than the old are now having their last rites read to them.
Writing. Like a screenplay, not a novel--but with lots of dashes, and constantly violating the "show, don't tell rule"--as it screams through the action.
Sentence fragments.
Irritation.