I Enjoyed your clip Fishmanlee.

I really like the music where the Jawas are poking the heads around the corners of Rocks and so fourth.

but It then feels like the music weakens R2-D2 being disabled and all the the tension is lost. This is more of a Video Editing Metronome than actually anything resembling music scored to the action on screen. It is not music score but a timer.

But as R2-D2 fails and falls the music is great from here on out on that cue until the end of the clip.

You might be running a tiny bit Late when R2-D2 is sucked up the Loading Pipe.... But I think what is happening there is John Williams scored the scene before they sped up the footage of R2-D2 being lifted up the pipe so that probably accounts for this discrepancy.