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The sound effect of the lightsaber hitting the ground should be a bit softer but I like that edit.

For the Canto Bight scene, my mind immediately went, “Wait, when did they get a ship!?”

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darthrush said:

I’ve been playing around with the digital release and exploring ways to alter Canto Bight.

I’m trying out a less aggressive editing path first off which would be going from the prison cell conversation to them in hyperspace. I am curious whether it would be best to cut to a different scene after the prison or one right after the other to make it less confusing.

https://vimeo.com/260178085

-Cut from prison cell to hyperspace
-Used The Last Jedi OST to smooth over transition

This is a vast improvement. The Fathier chase sequence was the worst part of the movie.

You should cut Rose saying, “That’s how we’re gonna win: Not by fighting what we hate, but by saving what we love.” That might be the most clichéd line in all of Star Wars. It is also nonsensical. It is impossible to win a war without fighting what you hate.

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Could you find a way to change the reason Finn and Rose are arrested? In the movie, they are bizarrely arrested for a minor parking violation. It would be more logical if they were arrested because they were identified as members of the Resistance.

If that’s possible, edit it so that Finn and Rose leave Canto Bight in the same ship that they originally landed.

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darthrush said:

I’ve been playing around with the digital release and exploring ways to alter Canto Bight.

I’m trying out a less aggressive editing path first off which would be going from the prison cell conversation to them in hyperspace. I am curious whether it would be best to cut to a different scene after the prison or one right after the other to make it less confusing.

https://vimeo.com/260178085

-Cut from prison cell to hyperspace
-Used The Last Jedi OST to smooth over transition

darthrush said:

Very, very rough test for an idea regarding Luke dropping the lightsaber:

https://vimeo.com/260179099

I am not sure you understand just how great these are!! I clicked on the link figuring I would give them a shot, and ended up grinning from ear-to-ear. These are perfect cuts!! I really hope people are willing to use these in their fan-edits! 😃

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ChiefWamsutta said:

I am not sure you understand just how great these are!! I clicked on the link figuring I would give them a shot, and ended up grinning from ear-to-ear. These are perfect cuts!! I really hope people are willing to use these in their fan-edits! 😃

I just wanted to say +1 for this. I think that these are both vast improvements over what we got, especially the lightsaber scene.

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LordPlagueis said:

darthrush said:

I’ve been playing around with the digital release and exploring ways to alter Canto Bight.

I’m trying out a less aggressive editing path first off which would be going from the prison cell conversation to them in hyperspace. I am curious whether it would be best to cut to a different scene after the prison or one right after the other to make it less confusing.

https://vimeo.com/260178085

-Cut from prison cell to hyperspace
-Used The Last Jedi OST to smooth over transition

This is a vast improvement. The Fathier chase sequence was the worst part of the movie.

You should cut Rose saying, “That’s how we’re gonna win: Not by fighting what we hate, but by saving what we love.” That might be the most clichéd line in all of Star Wars. It is also nonsensical. It is impossible to win a war without fighting what you hate.

This line will absolutely be gone. I am hoping to either re-purpose Finn’s last speeder run into him crashing right before he reaches the cannon or just getting rid of it all together. I’ll put up a concept clip soon so people can get the idea. Basically he would be closing in on it, then just as he got close, you see the speeder shake, his stabilizer stick thingy come off the ground, the ship turns wayside and then he crashes. I’d have to rescore it as well.

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I loved the lightsaber drop scene. About the Canto Bight one, it looks like what you had described a while back in a post I quoted in another thread recently - your ideas for Canto Bight after your 2nd viewing. Am I correct?

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Collipso said:

I loved the lightsaber drop scene. About the Canto Bight one, it looks like what you had described a while back in a post I quoted in another thread recently - your ideas for Canto Bight after your 2nd viewing. Am I correct?

Yes. My title post for the fanedit still has the scene order of a much more radically cut narrative but more and more I think it’s necessary to keep a trimmed version of the subplot since Finn does get some good characterization. DJ actually plays a key role in Finn’s development since he tries to convince how the war is worthless and such. Then he betrays them and you get a great, pivotal moment where Finn declares “Your wrong”. This is some key stuff that I feel should stay.

So my philosophy with the entire subplot is to maintain the elements that build Finn’s development and to cut everything else like animal cruelty, “rich people suck” and such. I’ll post a clip soon to illustrate this.

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Canto Bight First Scene

https://vimeo.com/260454749

-Finn asks Rose if she knows of Canto Bight and she says “only in stories”. After this we cut right to Canto Bight. It’s a nice and streamlined transition with no talk of how the city sucks.
-After they are reported for parking on the beach, we cut to them dashing into the casino, see the codebreaker and then get caught. This shows them in a more desperate rush to help the resistance, removes all animal cruelty elements, capitalism messages, and such. Now we get the core elements of what is needed from Canto Bight.

Feel free to comment on the editing of the clip. I am considering cutting right from “And they just went off towards the casino” to them running in the casino, since the establishing wide shot is a little short.

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darthrush said:

Canto Bight First Scene

https://vimeo.com/260454749

-Finn asks Rose if she knows of Canto Bight and she says “only in stories”. After this we cut right to Canto Bight. It’s a nice and streamlined transition with no talk of how the city sucks.
-After they are reported for parking on the beach, we cut to them dashing into the casino, see the codebreaker and then get caught. This shows them in a more desperate rush to help the resistance, removes all animal cruelty elements, capitalism messages, and such. Now we get the core elements of what is needed from Canto Bight.

Feel free to comment on the editing of the clip. I am considering cutting right from “And they just went off towards the casino” to them running in the casino, since the establishing wide shot is a little short.

The jump from the rich folks clinking glasses to the transport on the waterfall is rather sudden. Going from “only in stories” to Canto Bight’s rich folks was seamless. Loved that one. But transitioning to the next scene of the waterfall transport was unexpected for me.

I would remove “They just went off towards the Casino”. The wide shot of Canto Bight between the guy snitching and Finn running in the casino was so short that I didn’t even notice it on the first viewing.

I think this has A LOT of potential, but just lengthen a couple scenes because we transition to multiple places very fast in 47 seconds.

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ChiefWamsutta said:

darthrush said:

Canto Bight First Scene

https://vimeo.com/260454749

-Finn asks Rose if she knows of Canto Bight and she says “only in stories”. After this we cut right to Canto Bight. It’s a nice and streamlined transition with no talk of how the city sucks.
-After they are reported for parking on the beach, we cut to them dashing into the casino, see the codebreaker and then get caught. This shows them in a more desperate rush to help the resistance, removes all animal cruelty elements, capitalism messages, and such. Now we get the core elements of what is needed from Canto Bight.

Feel free to comment on the editing of the clip. I am considering cutting right from “And they just went off towards the casino” to them running in the casino, since the establishing wide shot is a little short.

The jump from the rich folks clinking glasses to the transport on the waterfall is rather sudden. Going from “only in stories” to Canto Bight’s rich folks was seamless. Loved that one. But transitioning to the next scene of the waterfall transport was unexpected for me.

I would remove “They just went off towards the Casino”. The wide shot of Canto Bight between the guy snitching and Finn running in the casino was so short that I didn’t even notice it on the first viewing.

I think this has A LOT of potential, but just lengthen a couple scenes because we transition to multiple places very fast in 47 seconds.

Same feelings here on that, I still agree there is good potential with some more dabbling!

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darthrush said:

You will all be surprised to hear then that the transition from the rich people to the waterfall is untouched and rignt from the regular film.

Are you serious? Wow. No wonder this segment of the movie didn’t sit well with me, hahaha.

Well, I appreciate everything you have done. 😃 I’d just add time to the wide shot of the casinos between the Snitch and Finn and Rose running. Maybe like 2-3 mroe seconds.

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Took some advice from various feedback I got and tried to improve the first Canto Bight scene.

https://vimeo.com/260569565

-Full Casino establishing shot restored after they are reported for parking on beach.
-Tracking shot of Canto Bight is cut short before we see Finn and then a shot of someone popping open some champagne is clipped to the end instead.

I like this version since it gives breathing room to feel the Casino before we see Finn and Rose. I like being able to absorb the culture and feel of the visuals and then getting out of there quick enough so we don’t get bogged down in other material.

Please tell me if there is anything else that can be improved.

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darthrush said:

Took some advice from various feedback I got and tried to improve the first Canto Bight scene.

https://vimeo.com/260569565

-Full Casino establishing shot restored after they are reported for parking on beach.
-Tracking shot of Canto Bight is cut short before we see Finn and then a shot of someone popping open some champagne is clipped to the end instead.

I like this version since it gives breathing room to feel the Casino before we see Finn and Rose. I like being able to absorb the culture and feel of the visuals and then getting out of there quick enough so we don’t get bogged down in other material.

Please tell me if there is anything else that can be improved.

That was a lot better. I really liked it!! Seeing the inside of the casino definitely helped!

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darthrush said:

Took some advice from various feedback I got and tried to improve the first Canto Bight scene.

https://vimeo.com/260569565

-Full Casino establishing shot restored after they are reported for parking on beach.
-Tracking shot of Canto Bight is cut short before we see Finn and then a shot of someone popping open some champagne is clipped to the end instead.

I like this version since it gives breathing room to feel the Casino before we see Finn and Rose. I like being able to absorb the culture and feel of the visuals and then getting out of there quick enough so we don’t get bogged down in other material.

Please tell me if there is anything else that can be improved.

Just a thought, but would it work with the tracking shot first? So: “from stories”, tracking shot, clinking glasses, balcony, waterfall, reported on beach, wide angle of casino, champagne popping, Finn?

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nhoj3 said:

darthrush said:

Took some advice from various feedback I got and tried to improve the first Canto Bight scene.

https://vimeo.com/260569565

-Full Casino establishing shot restored after they are reported for parking on beach.
-Tracking shot of Canto Bight is cut short before we see Finn and then a shot of someone popping open some champagne is clipped to the end instead.

I like this version since it gives breathing room to feel the Casino before we see Finn and Rose. I like being able to absorb the culture and feel of the visuals and then getting out of there quick enough so we don’t get bogged down in other material.

Please tell me if there is anything else that can be improved.

Just a thought, but would it work with the tracking shot first? So: “from stories”, tracking shot, clinking glasses, balcony, waterfall, reported on beach, wide angle of casino, champagne popping, Finn?

I’m not sure this would work all that well. The idea with the current order of scenes is that she says she has only heard of Canto Bight, the planet itself, in stories. Then you see the planet shots before anything in the casino. Then after the man says “they headed off towards the casino”, you get a wide shot of the casino, then you see inside, and then we see Finn.

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darthrush said:

nhoj3 said:

darthrush said:

Took some advice from various feedback I got and tried to improve the first Canto Bight scene.

https://vimeo.com/260569565

-Full Casino establishing shot restored after they are reported for parking on beach.
-Tracking shot of Canto Bight is cut short before we see Finn and then a shot of someone popping open some champagne is clipped to the end instead.

I like this version since it gives breathing room to feel the Casino before we see Finn and Rose. I like being able to absorb the culture and feel of the visuals and then getting out of there quick enough so we don’t get bogged down in other material.

Please tell me if there is anything else that can be improved.

Just a thought, but would it work with the tracking shot first? So: “from stories”, tracking shot, clinking glasses, balcony, waterfall, reported on beach, wide angle of casino, champagne popping, Finn?

I’m not sure this would work all that well. The idea with the current order of scenes is that she says she has only heard of Canto Bight, the planet itself, in stories. Then you see the planet shots before anything in the casino. Then after the man says “they headed off towards the casino”, you get a wide shot of the casino, then you see inside, and then we see Finn.

Sorry, I’m writing on my iPhone and probably cutting too many corners in my suggestion. I think that what I’m suggesting works within those bookends. I was just suggesting changing the order of how the casino is seen so that the first shot after the establishing shot of the planet is the casino tracking shot. That leads to the outside scenes and the “reporting” scene. Then the wide shot of the casino, then inside, but since the tracking scene was moved up you get to Finn and Rose right away.

Hope that makes sense… it does in my head at least… lol

Man, I really want to get into fan editing myself.

Love your work by the way.

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Until I figure out what to do about Canto Bight, I will finish up rescoring the Rey/Kylo vs Guards fight. Since I don’t watch the prequels as part of my personal canon, I want to see their share of great music implemented in the sequel trilogy. In TFA I used “Immolation Scene” music for Han’s death. The first of three possible rescores for TLJ will be “Duel of the Fates” for the guard fight. Here is the reason I think it works well:

-First off, it is just a piece of fantastic Star Wars music that makes almost anything better.
-Thematically, it’s completely appropriate music wise. The fight with the Guards is meant to show the potential for the power and domination that could come from Rey and Kylo combining their powers. Seeing this at stake and it’s epicness is what Duel of the Fates would help to contribute towards.

Obviously this is more for people who don’t have the PT in their personal canon, so I am open to suggestions and will release an audio track of my edit with no rescores. You can expect at least one other rescore that I am very excited about (still finishing audio work) and then one other possible one that has two potential scenes it can be used on.

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I present the first rescored scene in the edit. This is the scene of Kylo pleading for Rey to join him. The track I chose to rescore the scene with is the second half of “Anakin’s Dark Deeds” (non-orchestral section) from the episode three soundtrack.

I love the emotion that it adds and I feel it fits perfectly. Tell me what you all think!

https://vimeo.com/260874004

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The music works really well! However, it does feel very abrupt. I’d start it right when Rey begs Ben to let the fleet escape.