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Post #1151161

Author
SparkySywer
Parent topic
Star Wars: The Last Jedi - The Dark Cut (* unfinished project *)
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Date created
30-Dec-2017, 5:17 PM

The crawl’s kind awkward.

It is a time of peril. The warring factions of the Resistance and the First Order have dealt cripplingly blows to one another.
Meanwhile, Rey completes her journey to find Skywalker, certain he can restore a spark of hope to the fight.
Finn and Poe Dameron aid General Leia Organa, in an effort to find a new base for the RESISTANCE to stand against the rising tyranny in the galaxy…

I’d replace the first paragraph with “It is a time of peril. The warring factions of the Resistance and the First Order have crippled one another, and both sides are itching to deal the final blow.”

“Both sides have attacked each other” is a weird thing to say in a crawl.