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Post #1138955

Author
MalàStrana
Parent topic
TFA: A Gentle Restructure
Date created
6-Dec-2017, 4:53 AM
Last modified
6-Dec-2017, 4:57 AM
Edited by
MalàStrana
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Just a quick remark about the first paragraph of the crawl. Currently it is:

In his absence, the sinister FIRST ORDER has risen from the ashes of the fallen Empire, plotting its return to power.

Wouldn’t it work better with this slight change ?

In his absence, the sinister FIRST ORDER, risen from the ashes of the fallen Empire, is plotting its return to power.

(anyway: crawl subs in french done; deleted scene in french and english done; I’m ready to finish it as soon as possible)

Just to be sure: is the first Snoke scene going to stay as it was in V1 or is it changed back to the theatrical cut (so many ideas have been raised these past few pages I’m no longer sure) ?

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