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Post #1137461

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RogueLeader
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TFA: A Gentle Restructure (Released)
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Date created
3-Dec-2017, 3:24 AM

DominicCobb said:

If anything I’d say we should be looking for ways to trim the scene down so it doesn’t feel like it wasn’t envisioned as part of the climax (which the Snoke music makes plainly obvious, I feel).

Instead of having Snoke say, “It is time” at the beginning, could we possibly swap it out with something like “Now, the Resistance must be destroyed before they reach Skywalker.” It would infer that Hux told him the success of the first attack, and I think he uses the word “now” in one of his scenes, I’ll have to double check where.

Or, cut that line entirely and have Hux start with, “Supreme Leader, we have tracked their reconnaissance ship to the Ileenium system.” Taking “Supreme Leader” from another scene.

Might be worth another attempt.