Here’s another attempt at that little scene. I added some faint distant explosion sounds when we cut back to Finn and Rey, as well as using audio of Finn breathing heavily from earlier in the film (as in the previous clip I posted). I tried to thread the needle with the music as we transition into Snoke, and I think it’s much better than the initial mockup.
https://vimeo.com/245068520
password: monkeyThis works well, it’s interesting to see all the new ideas being tried!
The problems I see with this clip:
• At 0:25 Kylo needs to be replaced with Hux, shouldn’t be too difficult though.
• At 0:31 where Snoke looks over to the side. If Hux is the only one there Snoke’s gaze should be fixed on him. So the cut needs to happen sooner or the shot needs to be slowed so his head doesn’t move.
• At 0:47 the “Snoke music” keeps playing, which for me doesn’t work. I think it only fits in the presence of Snoke and I’d rather see it replaced with a bit of something else. Perhaps a more orchestral cue could start to build over Snokes last lines to give a different feeling to them as well, as “prepare the weapon” is now a “hand me my gun” type of line rather than “we will fire eventually”.
For the second bullet point, I think it is ok with him looking off. It seems more like when he is talking, it’s like he is saying that line and is also thinking/pondering over the matter, which get’s interrupted by Hux line. It seems ok as is … at least to me.