Just finished watching the cur. Overall as well, I enjoyed it. I think it just needs some more polish and shine to make it fabulous. A good alternative to Hal’s version. His would be more movie trilogy … yours would be connecting the clone wars to it. I list below my views from what I have watched. I have + and - to indicate good things and “bad” things. (at least things that need to be corrected/polished)
Sorry its long winded, but I really cared about what you did!
++ Good cutting choices during the space battle. No more dumb dialogue that makes Anakin seem not component. Like Hal’s edit, good moves man.
++ Since your edit is more clone wars, including dried scenes was fine to me since that was your intent. I liked the replaced voices so they weren’t so high-pitched and irritating.
++ I LOVED the “roger roger” from Anakin and Obi wan. Very fitting with their characters and close friendship from Clone Wars. Why that was not in the original release … oh well. Good call!
– Cant understand dialogue getting out of elevator to doku. gibberish. I turned it up a bit but I still could not understand it.
– both Anakin and Obi Wan’s “councelor” echoes. Very awkward. I would keep it to Obi wan saying chancellor and anakin saying are you ok? You can have Anakin talking over Obi wan toward the end IF possible.
++ Thanks for removing the “twice as powerful” line.
+/- You made good editing choices to make the “disarm + behead” scene to removal the dialogue. One clean swoop. If there was a way to make it one smooth and quick execution, I think it would flow better since the dialogue has been removed from the theatrical. I doubt it could be done, but if there was a way to do it, I think that would look better.
++ Removal of the bridge scene between Grevious and his crew about leveling out the ship. I think it worked without it, it kept the focus on Anakin and Crew without jumping around. Granted, those scenes weren’t too distracting or anything, so having it or not having it works both ways to me.
++ Good editing on Ray-Shield scene. Again, helped make Anakin be competent and helped make the droids not so annoyingly high pitched.
+/- Not sure about the ships “helping” Anakin land scene voice change. I don’t think they were necessarily clones in the original release. The voice is different enough from the “original” clone voice in the movie. I think the regular dialogue flows better. Maybe if there was a way to add some effects to the voice so its not so clear and crisp it would help that. Since again, I know your wanting to link Clone Wars with this movie. Distort the voice a bit and it would sound better. At least to me personally.
++ Good on the removal of “no excuses” Obi wan and Anakin are close, no need for that line.
++ Nice editing on Palps reassuring Anaking about him being on the Jedi Counil giving reason why he would be on master council. Nice!
++ Good editing on master council with Anakin. Having Obi Wan give his scowl at the beginning, when Anakin was bursting out instead of the end was much better. Great!
++ Smart choice adding deleted scene about senates talking about “the mess” with Republic.
– Kind of awkward transition during anakin and obi wan speech. May need some polishing since there was some obvious cutting. Again it helps the relationship … just a bit unpolished. Not sure how to smooth it out.
++ Like the chuckle at begining of Anakin and Padme scene. Adds softness to him, which is good.
– The talking over part between Padme and Anakin needs some polishing. It doesn’t sound/feel right. I think he voice goes to soft. Granted Anakin’s voice would be stronger than hers but her line goes mute. That part did feel awkward in general. That part does need some polishing if possible. If not … I would leave it the original way.
++ Adding Hayden’s “No No No No” was a good touch.
– Adding General skywalker as he walks in the box suite at the opera was a bit … hmmmm out of nowhere since no one was really looking at him and sounded very dubbed over. It’s too awkward to me. Granted I know you want to add more dialogue that flows from the Clone Wars … but it was a bit much.
++ Nice edit with anakin saying obi wan instead of master at “the docks.” None of that constant master stuff was so tire some.
+/- Intresting re use of the scene Anakin talks to Anakin about his dream earlier at that time. Interesting. It gives a reason why Anakin didn’t open up to her at first, which flowed well from the scene “of 2000.” I am ok with it.
++ Thanks for removing the previous training scene dialogue from Grevious. Not needed since they fought so many times in the Clone Wars!
+/- Not bad edits with Anakin and Palpatine convo/reveal … not sure based on your edits if some parts can be smoothed out. It was obvious there were cuts, so if there was a way to remove it. That would be good!
+/- The beginning Dialogue between Anakin and Obi wan before the duel had good cutting decisions. There was still a bit of a slight awkwardness to it since there were obvious cuts. If there was a way to polish that, I think it would work well. I did like some of the “no responses” to Anakin. Made him sound less stupid-evil.
++ Good cuts on saber battle. Also removal of high ground.
++ I did like what you did about the babies being born and sent out. It was done pretty well. Granted, it was a very different style from this movie, and the other ones, but I understand why you did that. Because the voice over was going over multiple scenes, it helped it justified the jumping around. Worked well!
++ The ending scene with Vader. It is very satisfying way to end it. I do also like Chainshawash’s suggestion about the scene goes black before he exhales. Black scene for a few seconds, then credits. I would highly suggest trying that and maybe making a clip for us to see?
So wrap up - All in all great. I do agree about the coloring, very dark and contrasty. Most of my “negative” comments are about polishing, which some is possible and maybe others are not possible. I do think the removal of the line “Anakin Skywalker” is too much of a dub over and is distracting. For removing and element, I think its that one.