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Post #1057211

Author
TheBossCheese
Parent topic
Star Wars Episode I: Cloak Of Deception (Released)
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Date created
19-Mar-2017, 4:20 PM

Hi Hal,

I have finally just watched you’re version of episode 1. I have already previously seen all of your other versions of 2 & 3 and your edits are my favorite, best presentation and really smart editing choices.

After finally watching episode 1 I feel I can tell you what I think could work better, although I understand how subjective fan edits can be.

-Remove Scene of Queen Amadalla telling Nute Gunray that the Jedi are coming to force a settlement.

I have just always felt the scene was awkward and abrupt because Nute Gunray acts like he forgot all about pursueing the jedi.

Queen Amidalla acts like shes strong and aggressive but then in the following scene she acts like she dosnt know why communications are jammed and then says that she doesn’t want conflict.

I think we should just have Obiwans line about the negotiations being short and then transition to Naboo where the communictations with Corosaunt get cut off, besides the opening crawl already tells us the planet is being occupied by the federation.

-Add back in Jabba the Hutt & Bib Fortuna.

He runs the gambling ring on Tatooine, seeing him appear reinforces the idea of why Watto is afraid of Quigon telling the Hutts about their bet. If you had not seen any star wars you would not have gotten Quigons exposition. Maybe just when the race scene begins don’t have the announcers introduce him he just walks in as the scene starts. Then when he spits his food. Then when hes falling asleep at the end. I have to admit I am a big fan of the hutt.

-Remove Shmi’s line about "giving hope to those who have none."
In this scene she just needs to say that shes proud of him.

I read somebody elses review on fanedit.org and agreed that Anakins mom could use some additional lines overall to make her more involved and appear to be more of a caring mother. Though I understand the way edits work and maybe her cuts are necessary.

I figured with Jabba and Shmi reinserted it should make up for the missing runtime for the removed Nute Gunray Scene.