I dislike the unnecessary inclusion of the Death Star as part of a very abrupt slideshow of placing everything neatly how it is as ANH begins.
Unfortunately, I think the scene feels ‘edited’ when we have Tarkin joining Palpatine to gaze out the window and miming “I’ll leave you two to it” without the Death Star.
I believe this may have been mentioned before and although this may not be necessary for Hal’s edit, I think a good solution would be to use some photoshop wizardry to put the laser dish on the station’s equator. It would suggest that this is not the same Death Star we see in the OT, but possibly a smaller prototype. This would also connect with the schematics in the Death Star plans the Rebels steal, since that also features a version where the dish is on the equator.